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Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2006-10-13 01:23 PM

Brother

Take a rest, brother,
lean on the wind for a spell.
Roll your bed out on the sand
in a sheltered hollow.
You deserve an easy hour
for once
in this misbegotten span.

Stop walking through the fire
and take a drop of water
for that fever that burns me
from your eyes.

Take a rest, brother,
and let me go to mine;
untied,
untroubled,
unworthy
of your pain

that drags me back
to breathing
this used and useless air
again.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2006-10-13 07:51 PM

NIce...James

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-10-14 12:01 PM

powerful work
it speaks well

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2006-10-14 08:34 AM

Nan~

This read is hauntingly poignant to me~

I want to know more ... the inspire ?

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2006-10-14 10:05 AM

powerful and very deeply touching

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2006-10-14 07:21 PM

Nan...A brother, by blood or humanity doesn't matter really..the words could hold true. Strong and poignantly written.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

6 posted 2006-10-14 10:30 PM

Nan,

Stunningly poignancy! I'm not that great of a poet, but for what my opinion is worth, this is masterfully expressed. I've read it several times, and the mystery calls for more.

miscellaena

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

7 posted 2006-10-14 10:55 PM

Nan,
This write creates paths to all kinds of images. Each a mystery leaving me guessing. Peace.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

8 posted 2006-10-16 09:40 AM

Thanks so much, guys. As to the inspiration, lately I've had several friends pass away. A couple of them hung on to life when it was hard and nothing but pain, because family just couldn't let them go. And their family suffered as much as they did. That led me to this.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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