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Martie
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0 posted 2006-10-10 12:29 PM


Just a Notch Over

The sky has turned thick
and ominous with blackbirds

She hears the calling of the crows
as a portent of change

Are the clouds holding
the sky captive?

Let go of summer evening’s
ache of last twilight
and close the door
on sweet and long dusk
now is the month of falling fallow
and it rustles with giving and taking

so say the dancing leaves

Heart to the keyboard
she plays the clouds and crows
a riot of life
where fingers are birds themselves
and feel the sun slant in the window
to touch the shoulder
variegated and dappled

How hold on to the light
when the sky is dark?

A strong thing   a love song
fed with sweet small things
change comes quietly
just a notch over
where truth has always been

She will roll up her jeans
admitting at last that it's ok
to be as tall as she really is

© Copyright 2006 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2006-10-10 01:53 PM


Let go of summer evening’s
ache of last twilight
and close the door
on sweet and long dusk
now is the month of falling fallow
and it rustles with giving and taking

so say the dancing leaves

~*~

So, say, indeed...
and when the rains reign
homefires bring us back
to our heart...



" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

jwesley
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2 posted 2006-10-10 06:59 PM


Marti, enjoyed this...especially the last stanza!

jwesley

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3 posted 2006-10-10 07:27 PM


How hold on to the light
when the sky is dark?

A strong thing   a love song
fed with sweet small things
change comes quietly
just a notch over
where truth has always been
Loved this part best Martie...
how hold onto the light, indeed lady...
I think sometimes, we just do it the best that we can.  Hugs you....

passing shadows
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4 posted 2006-10-10 09:57 PM


awesome!
The Lady
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5 posted 2006-10-10 10:18 PM



Martie
the whole thing is exquisite
but it's about that last stanza
wow!


Goodknight
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6 posted 2006-10-13 08:04 AM


just terrific Martie
Pilgrimage
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7 posted 2006-10-13 01:24 PM


Martie, I love this one.  And the first six lines could be a poem all on their own, but I'm glad you didn't stop there.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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8 posted 2006-10-13 04:30 PM


Remember, dear lady...."fallow" is a word like "weed" or "old"....it's all in how you look at things.

Got me thinking again, darn ya! Worse, you made it feel good....

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