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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2006-10-09 07:03 AM

spoken tokens of slow motion kin
read me the poems of your highways
bring me those gypsy songs
that traveled the gravel shoulders
unworthy of willows or widows

I will watch your children playing
from the windows of my sky
they will know me as god sometimes
on their midweek sundays
when afternoons are their heavens

and raising hell is acceptable
after night comes over their minds
in velvet blankets with skin
and their women moan their names
as gasping sounds chantering

read me the highways of their poems then
___________

daark

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2006-10-09 07:42 AM

A journey well worth traveling Dark.

Much enjoyed this side of your pen.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2006-10-09 07:51 AM

Now this is making
the morning move...

good morning, Sir.

And thank you.

JLHunter
Senior Member

since 2006-10-08

Posts 557
CA United States

3 posted 2006-10-09 07:58 AM

Hi, daark.

That is a great write, even though it is somewhat dark, and some might say disturbing. Very colorful imagery brings up many pictures, but this is faintly reminiscent of the Amish schoolhouse tragedy... I don't know if that's just how my mind works or not.

Anyway, as I said, great write.

John

Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight?
Brain: The same thing we do every night, Pinky: try to take over the world!

Refugee
Member

since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

4 posted 2006-10-09 09:00 AM

I don't see this as dark, but light and full of childhood memories somehow. Maybe I am way off.

Continually blown away by your talent DS.

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2006-10-09 09:43 AM

DS

"I will watch your children playing
from the windows of my sky
they will know me as god sometimes"

Sometimes it seems that way.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2006-10-09 10:11 AM

"read me the poems of your highways
bring me those gypsy songs"

I liked this part best...
makes me think of road trips, and finding poetry along the way..

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2006-10-09 10:49 AM

pipfamily, thank you all for the blessing..
it is just a highway jot..from an edge of sky prospective..

martie, sunshine, sea, donna, refugee and john

thanks again for the time you spend looking in these humble windows

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

8 posted 2006-10-09 03:27 PM

and me too Stranger
I like it...

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2006-10-09 04:03 PM

ladyone, and you too..thanks hon

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

10 posted 2006-10-09 10:11 PM

And I like it too

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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2006-10-10 06:54 AM

ms az, you smile me little one, thank you for the wave

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