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Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2006-10-06 05:04 AM


A de-winged angel falls too soon
into a dark and empty void
and, lo, the wall of death
in upward loom and ominous
to one so well accustomed
to the dawn of a tomorrow.

Tall of stature, short of will;
to no avail her feeble jumps
when tied her heart to earth
and her claim to motherhood.

Hands, fingers, toes, and feet
search and feel for crevices
but no handhold or a “lift me up”  
in walls that only spirit climbs.

And so no fallen angel I
still with wing and well endowed
to scale the highs and lows
placed exactly and just so
to make me think and think again.

I think of you and me and then
until de-winged and thrown into
the void of my today
that keeps me so in baleful stare
but for now it dawns another day
and I’ve grown accustomed to
the habit of remembering.

To life I say, “Aim, fire and wing.
You’ve done it well; not yet the bell
that suffocates the dawn!"

Helen / 6 October 2006


© Copyright 2006 Helen - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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1 posted 2006-10-06 07:25 AM


To life I say, “Aim, fire and wing.
You’ve done it well; not yet the bell
that suffocates the dawn!"


wow Helen!!! I LOVE this!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2006-10-06 08:22 AM


Thanks so much, Dixie!  
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
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3 posted 2006-10-06 11:31 AM


Helen

"And so no fallen angel I
still with wing and well endowed
to scale the highs and lows
placed exactly and just so
to make me think and think again."

Your thoughts ripple, my friend.  

Refugee
Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97

4 posted 2006-10-06 12:14 PM


Takes my breath away with this style and content.

Thank you.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
5 posted 2006-10-06 01:13 PM


Thanks, Martie!  

Refugee - thank you.  Your comment is much appreciated.

Kalandria
Junior Member
since 2006-05-23
Posts 44
Yorkshire, England
6 posted 2006-10-06 03:55 PM


A beautiful poem with a very powerful ending. I loved this.
iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
7 posted 2006-10-06 04:55 PM


"Hands, fingers, toes, and feet
search and feel for crevices
but no handhold or a “lift me up”  
in walls that only spirit climbs."

The analogy of mountain climbing...Helen, how appropriate!  Much enjoyed this and thanks for sharing.   ....jo


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