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The Only Color
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The Only Color |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
I’m trying to paint your picture; but I don’t know how The first word that popped into my head when I met you was “Wow” I’d almost mistaken you for a girl at first When I said so I’d thought that you’d really burst But you just smiled and said “I get that a lot” You’re fake smile was so easy to spot Most guys take stuff like that really serious The fact that you didn’t struck me as curious When you offered to pose for me I was jumping up and down with glee Excited to draw someone so striking Finding the offer generous and inviting But when I started to paint the colors didn’t flow What was wrong I didn’treally know... Usually I have no problem picking up my brush But I didn’t feel any kind of inspiration or rush There are so many colors but not one is right for you It doesn’t make sense but it’s almost like... ...some things not right with you... As if there’s a missing piece to your soul Almost as if you weren’t born whole The void I’ve seen in your eyes makes me uneasy Thinking like this is making me queasy Maybe there’s some kind of twist; like the marks I’ve seen on you’re wrist But maybe I shouldn’t look too hard; Ignorance is bliss You’re really not much older than me Still a boy but soon a man you’ll be Sitting in front of me you looked so angelic The fact that I couldn’t capture you makes me sick But the vibes I was getting were really unsettling Perhaps there’s more to this whole thing... Giving up for now I turn out the light Trying to get the image of you out of my sight I find myself submerged in darkness and I let out a gasp Something so shocking but so easy to grasp Painting you won’t take much work or tacked Because the only color I could use is black [This message has been edited by Kira Aso (10-05-2006 05:35 PM).] |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Have you ever met some one who didn't seem all there? Like maybe they were a little less than human? I'm not really sure if you can be less than human but... ...Maybe I'm just paraniod! I'd much prefer to be paraniod than be right. (I had this really freako dream and somehow it reminded me of the boy with the hollow eyes) *shivers* I really don't like the title. I also don't like this poem (If you could call it that) And I plain old don't like the creepy feeling I get when I read it. If you can give any suggestions I'll be glad to hear them! [This message has been edited by Kira Aso (10-05-2006 06:04 PM).] |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
Enjoyed this one Kira. I've often been told I'm not all there  . Though I don't think people mean I am the same as the subject of your poem. At least I hope they don't!This poem reminds me of a girl I once knew. Like the poem she was just somehow... wrong. I could never put my finger on just why. Keep on writing so I can keep on reading  "The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
Thanx for reading! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Kira, I like the contrast that comes out in this poem. A little spooky... Good job in keeping my attention, too. |
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Kira Aso Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 351Closer to Hell... |
I'm happy you enjoyed. |
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