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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2006-10-04 10:46 PM


I grew up crooked
falling out of trees
an accident on purpose
with an element of surprise
and too much contemplation, I -
do not comprehend how
the eyes are the gateway if
mine are stone, gray.

I grew a girl with too many
questions, strung like diamonds
round her neck, or pebbles in
the bottom of your shoe, they're
the same, ultimately, it's all
the same shame anyway, and
she feels like pulling out
her hair, again.

I watered her and then stepped
back, watched her grow and
how about that, an old woman
confused in her young skin,
a young girl wondering what
constitutes a sin, and I
am left to try and
try again.

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miscellanea
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OH
1 posted 2006-10-04 10:54 PM


Alyssa,

  You once told me how you liked it when I put to different images together to make comparisons.  You did this masterfully, Lady!  And as to questions...that's my middle name, too.  I sure understand the diamonds and the pebbles begot by asking them!  Take care, Alyssa.  It is very good to read your writing again.  

    keep on asking those questions!

miscellanea

miscellanea
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OH
2 posted 2006-10-04 10:55 PM


I want this in my library!
passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2006-10-04 11:00 PM


now THIS I like!!!
aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
4 posted 2006-10-04 11:11 PM


THIS
I like too

The Lady
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The Southwest
5 posted 2006-10-04 11:27 PM




I like it too
especially that powerful
ending...


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