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Open Poetry #39

what do i have to offer

william foos
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since 2006-09-13

Posts 77
schenectady,new york,usa

0 posted 2006-10-04 09:06 AM

what do i have to offer
as i walk in the cave of my soul
the voice of God falls on my ear
but i have no coin on my body
no offering to give
but my self
yet am i worthy
to be in his presence
or could i be killed on the spot
for everything i know
things that the human race
is not ready to know
i must stay here in
this dark cave

i see what i write and write what i see

[This message has been edited by william foos (10-04-2006 10:04 AM).]

Refugee
Member

since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

1 posted 2006-10-04 09:28 AM

Deep, dark and philosophical like I like a lot of times in poetry.
Good working of metaphors.

Only one thing, is it a misspelling of "not" on the 3rd line from the end?

(is no ready to know)

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