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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rain The rain sweeps down upon my face And covers it with bleeds of lace Dropping off my nose and chin Making rivers on my skin The rain is warm the clouds are gray A gentle breeze in steady play The rain impairs horizons view But when it’s gone the world will new The sun will come to light the day And flowers open up and stay And butterflies will fly once more To drink the nectar in the core And I will walk the valley’s green To play among the unforeseen And say a little prayer of grace This rain that bled upon my face Come walk with me in rains renew Under wonders sky of blue |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
Well, Seymour I am amazed! I really like this. Excellent write. I am not usually one for nature poems but this is a cut above. It's going in my library. "The rain is warm the clouds are gray A gentle breeze in steady play" I just love those lines. In fact, I would have posted the whole thing again if I could have. Keep up the good work! "The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun." One God by The Beautiful South |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"And I will walk the valley’s green To play among the unforeseen And say a little prayer of grace This rain that bled upon my face Come walk with me in rains renew Under wonders sky of blue" A wonderful write Sy! It's raining up here in Canada right now.. want to come up here and we'll do a little singin' and dancin' in the rain? Just like Fred Astaire! Have a bright and beautiful day! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Come walk with me in rains renew Under wonders sky of blue" Sir Sy it rains a lot in Florida I know I spent August there but it hasn't rained in this desert in over six months thanks for the rain...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Triskaidekaphobia Thank you so much for a wonderful reply. Nancy, It would be my delight. Lady, May the coming rain delight you as much as I.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Putting on my walking shoes now, Sy. Meet you near the garden gate. *hugs*....jo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
iliana I'll be there sweety. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You see past the soggy in believing the sunshine will come again... I get bogged in the moment. *S* Beautiful write!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Have no fear the sun is there. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy...it rained here just the other day...really it did. I'd like to walk with you in yours.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie It would be my pleasure to walk with you in the rain. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I think Martie is fibbing, I don't believe that part of Callllie For Nigh A has gotten any rain... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus LoL if she's willing I'm willing. |
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CraigM Junior Member
since 2006-10-05
Posts 13 |
Wow. What a great poem. I loved it |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I'll come walk with you anytime, Seymour. Sounds like your path is a lot better than mine. And, although I try to change this path, it always turns out to be the same. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
CraigM You are very kind, thank you SmartChick The path is the same It's the mind that makes it look different. Bless you |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
I too, am not a big nature poem fan, but these lines: Come walk with me in rains renew Under wonders sky of blue I just had to say, great job. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Refugee Thank you and I wish you well in your travels. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I love when the rain bleeds on my face. You captured the beauty of rain and the gifts it brings. Thank you. a |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
aziza Thank you for the read and sweet comment. |
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DreamerSpirit Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 240Buenos Aires, Argentina |
Excellent poem... i really liked it. i hope i can write like that one day.. but i guess i still have a long way to go. excellent writing! Denis. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denis, Thank you, you are very kind. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, Mr. T., I nearly missed this mist of a poem! I absolutely LOVE it! ~ and that is why I am tucking it away for a rainy day, so to speak!  One of the loveliest poems on rain that I have had the pleasure of reading! EA |
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Moonkist Member
since 2006-09-29
Posts 197Pennsylvania |
Hello Seymour! I feel like I just took that walk with you! Beautifully written! Nature is a wonder to feel and behold! Wondering if this was inspired by sight seen or from the mind's eye... just curious. ...Namaste... ~Moonkist~ Freedom Now |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Moonkist From the minds eye, getting a little old to be walking in the rain. Thank you for the read and nice comment. Earth Angel You say the nicest things. |
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max-v-d New Member
since 2006-10-10
Posts 1Canada |
Hi Seymour. A very nice piece of reading. Although it reads like a nature poem I think there is a more to it then that. Like a personal journey fom somewhere to somewhere. Am I wrong? |
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