navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #39 » A Garden District Oracle (a consultation and correspondence)
Open Poetry #39
Post A Reply Post New Topic A Garden District Oracle (a consultation and correspondence) Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2006-09-30 11:07 PM



In answer to the question
that you never deigned to take to task:
I do not think you ask too much
I don't believe you ever asked
but stood there like an orphanage
illuminated by the tact
of coppering gone verdigris
and twinings of the walk-me plant
nestling the shift of slate
in burial of fact--
purslane blooming in the sun
as mold impressed the colonnade
velveteen the fingerings
of every stop someone had cast
leaning on the post...

a child in noisy crinoline

and wrinkles in her leggings, grin

offering the lemonade

for six cents a cup and that

was strained to order

without pulp

in answer to the question that

you never thought to ask.

© Copyright 2006 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
1 posted 2006-10-01 12:37 PM


Just *hugs* Ser....makes me so sad...but your mind's eye and magical pen show me things I never got the chance to see and I thank you for that.....

But, I think I know what this one is about....and it is not the landscape, but perhaps, the environment......*wink*...jojo  

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

2 posted 2006-10-01 12:50 PM


yer my onliest friend...sniff sniff.

Thanks Jo.



and what was the question again?


XOx Uriah xOX
Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403
Virginia
3 posted 2006-10-01 01:08 AM


I love your writing.
With this...I love the sound of it all in my head.  I love the feel of it.  I just wish I was smart enough to understand it.
The straining and filtering is very familiar. LOL
I would be honored to be added among your friends...if you would have me.  or...wherever you find a suitable place for me to fit...mascot...scarecrow...punching bag...
I dont care.   :: bows ::

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2006-10-01 01:20 AM


Uriah?

I would love to duet with you.

I can't promise too much tho, my time allowance is on the stingy side these days, but if you are willing, I see us doing an old fashioned style thingie....

If y'wanna give it a go, drop me a line, k?

smooches

and thanx

miscellanea
Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060
OH
5 posted 2006-10-01 01:27 AM


Serenity Blaze,

"In answer to the question"

I'm not sure what this is really all about, but that line grabbed me.  I'm really into questions!

Questions are good.  Would we have ever learned to speak if we hadn't questioned what someone wanted and the words they could use to best reach their goals?  We stole those words from someone who modeled them, then used them to create our own thoughts.  I guess where I'm going with this is the art of communication.  One grows from questioning.  (Now, just wouldn't ya know a teacher would get on her soapbox and tell ya everything ya already know?)  This year especially, I have found my own art has improved just by asking my students better questions involving their opinions, actually taking a couple of minutes to process and reflect upon their comments, and THEN, thinking about how to apply it on a higher level of Bloom's Taxomony, such as Synthesis and Application.  Creativity of thought still exists when I add my own ideas to students' and I end up creating a broader spectrum of colors than before. All that for finally opening my mind that a ten year old might discover something that I haven't.  (This year has been a humbling experience!  I have learned more from elementary aged students by listening to their answers of my questions than umpteen years of college (not to imply the colleges didn't teach well, but I have about 700 teachers now from whom I can learn instead of a few professors.)  

  Questioning and Observation are the meat of Scientific Investigation and ART.  I think that's why I like Science so much!    

Hey, what's this about an onlies friend?  Sounds like it's time to "Bath Away the Day!"
Remember that poem???  You were so kind to Sadelite, asking her questions that would enrich her description.

Oh, I have babbled on so and probably didn't even respond to theme here, but it's my own interpretation.  That's ok, isn't it?

  If I flunked out...well, just call me a flunkie.  I'm fine with it.  (Humility at its best!!)  It's nice to read your work once again.  

miscellanea

[This message has been edited by miscellanea (10-01-2006 02:04 AM).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

6 posted 2006-10-01 01:35 AM


BEAUTIFUL!

Misc? Your explanation is lovely, and that's the key to my entire parenting.

I just get quiet and let THEM talk.

and thank you, too, for bein' a friend.

One of these days, I am gonna have a great big ole Japanese bath party!

miscellanea
Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060
OH
7 posted 2006-10-01 01:54 AM


What a coincidence!  On Thursday, our school had three guest artists teaching about Japanese culture!  Our school is trying to increase the awareness of other cultures and what we can learn from each other.  You see, our children are rural, and many haven't had the enrichment of learning from others outside a fifty mile radius.  It was a fabulous day.  You should have seen the sparkle in my student's eyes to think about something in a different way.  

I do have a book about customs, but opted not to indulge them in pictures of the bathing customs, although I understand it to be a very natural and beautiful experience!  I just bet there's going to be curious kid who'll read about it on his own now that he's found there's another universe outside our little town!   He'll probably think he hit the Jackpot like having a Hustler magazine, (although you and I know it's not the same thing at all!) I can just see that kid bringing in the pictures now.  Don't think my youngsters are quite ready for that...  but a Japanese bathing experience outdoors with spring water does sound somewhat refreshing!  

Take care.  

miscellanea

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
8 posted 2006-10-01 03:42 PM


One of the ways to measure the 'success' of a poem, is by the replies that it engenders. I would say that by the responses that you have received, your poem has met with great success!  ~ as have you personally!

When readers want to be counted among your friends, that speaks volumes about you as a person!

Loving Light,
Linda


sandgrain
Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA
9 posted 2006-10-01 04:02 PM


Loved this, but (sniff, sniff...) you don't want me for a friend?  Our oldest son was a walking question box, always miles ahead of his peers.  His sister, 16 months younger, nothing motivated, so I think most of it is inborn.

   Rae

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
10 posted 2006-10-01 04:34 PM


serenity  
So you caught me with my pants down. But I was only getting into the first of the two Japanese baths. For there is where I soak.
You always tickle my fancy.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

11 posted 2006-10-01 04:57 PM


We're gonna have to make that Japanese bath the Pacific Ocean.

Anybody up for body surfing?

And for the record, I really do love everybody.

They don't always love me back, but I just keep trying. So hugs and love to ALL.

and a blushing thank you

Refugee
Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97

12 posted 2006-10-02 02:31 PM


Wow.

Just.
Wow.

seraphin
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004
Michigan
13 posted 2006-10-02 02:39 PM


I love this. The flow, the visual it provides. Very, very well done.

Sandra

iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
14 posted 2006-10-03 02:34 AM


How much for a glass of your lemonade?  I'm thirsty and need some more refreshment.  *smile*
Triskaidekaphobia
Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...
15 posted 2006-10-03 09:57 AM


Hmmm, I may sulk... You are far too good and it makes me jealous! This is utterly amazing and I am green with envy... or maybe its verdigris?

Now, I have to go and get lemonade...

"The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun
With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun."

One God by The Beautiful South

suthern
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723
Louisiana
16 posted 2006-10-03 10:39 AM


You caught me with the title... kept me with images so vivid I could feel the hot slate through my shoes and smell the lemons... and left me wondering just how much we don't see because it's easier not to...

Fantastic write!

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #39 » A Garden District Oracle (a consultation and correspondence)

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary