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WasUn-titled now it's "Filament Of Filigree"
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WasUn-titled now it's "Filament Of Filigree" |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan 
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swept up by a broom made of peacock feathers teal and crimson mixed in with bits of heart and soul so gentle the motion no bruising of devotion so to hold on to the hope that you won’t let me go I gave you my dreams then later my words I gave you my fears but kept back one or two hid away the darkest truth from the flame of your eyes the one fear where I was to lose you too so just where do I find filament of filigree thread of gossamer strong to bind you to me so how do I ask when all words are muted please don’t go on without me [This message has been edited by seraphin (09-29-2006 12:55 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
beautiful imagery capturing the emotions "filaments of filigree" a title perhaps |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
seraphin A feather is free....peacocks color so much of me....and to hold on is to lose something beautiful. You've captured a feeling here so beautifully.  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Midnightsun and I agree....the title should be "filament of filigree" - - thought I'd be the first to suggest it but, should have known.... enjoyed.. j. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Thank you all. I have taken your suggestion, as I hope you noticed. I appreciate the help as this was more an outpouring and that singular feature (title) evaded me. Again, my sincere thanks. Sandra |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
oh! "so just where do I find filament of filigree thread of gossamer strong to bind you to me" exquisite Sandra! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sandra, so much feeling within this poem. Great job of writing...Those fears can be real and hopefully can also be taken away slowly. |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
A very lovely and souful write. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
James, I am happy you enjoyed, and grateful for your eyes. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Lady, Your words always humble me. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Magnus, I read your work and I envision the hope they will be, taken away that is. But, not all men are as you, such a rarity. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Steve, My thanks, kind sir. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Amazing, very nice indeed. I love the title, it's perfect. I miss reading your poetry, very refreshing. Cheers - Ed Once you are truly insane, it’s all picnics with Kafka after that. See, it’s the process of going crazy that you gotta worry about. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Ed, I don't think I have ever been told I was missed! Thank you so much! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm glad this came back up so I didn't miss it! |
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