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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast

0 posted 2006-09-28 08:09 AM



I always would prefer the gold
of your gift of bronze
to the wet whisper of jade
when she would pocket herself

in the soul of my leather
but then again she was handy
and obvious is better sometimes
when diving for treasure below

and she had lost some things too
like her rule book and instructions
said whatever I did was fine to do
it was the polishing she needed

and being worn after was my choice
she could hang or dangle depending
but would prefer the latter
as my heart would be closer when

she became a lot more like you
______________

daark


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william foos
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since 2006-09-13
Posts 77
schenectady,new york,usa
1 posted 2006-09-28 09:21 AM


i feel that
this is even
deeper than
the words
portray

keep doing well
love the papa

i see what i write and write what i see

Dark Stranger
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West Coast
2 posted 2006-09-28 09:46 AM


william friend..thank you for the review
Martie
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3 posted 2006-09-28 12:41 PM


DS

"my heart would be closer when

she became a lot more like you"


These lines got to me in that place within that ache comes to sometimes.  

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2006-09-28 12:46 PM


ms martie, you bless me little neighbor, thanks hon
The Lady
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5 posted 2006-09-28 03:05 PM



nice comparison
Stranger
gold of bronze
wet whisper of jade...


Dark Stranger
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West Coast
6 posted 2006-09-28 03:33 PM


ladyone, jewelry store windows are interesting to drive by, thanks ms
Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2006-09-28 04:32 PM


Have always loved both the gold of bronze and the gem of jade, could never pick a fav tho'.  Nicely done Dark.
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2006-09-28 04:33 PM


ms gs..thanks lady friend
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