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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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when you wake in your azure morning will your eyes dare to recognize skin draped reckless over bones and the back of my matchstick armor will your songs be sun dried music that are echos heard underwater where I am the grinder of stones for neptune in his gaudy oredom will your eyes be the seeping dawn that warms the wallowed womb where I was buried in the last time by a woman's wanton without fantasy will your whispers be my salvation licked from a saliva's spitting cross left on some stranger's storefronts by the hunter of a healed boredom in the valley of cricket kneed pines _______________ daark |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Given the title and then this line "in the valley of cricket kneed pines" put some very dark imagery into my head... Not everyone has your way with winding the necks of lexis but you do make us think... yes you do. Thank you for that. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun..it is still daark here thanks ms |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Well, we have the sun here. She is peeking out from behind some clouds blushing rosy as I read this and say, "ah Dark! You've done it once again". Good morning, Sir. Sandra |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sandra, you make me smile, thanks for the sun words..and the morning greeting |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
Another great one Dark. I am always impressed, and like everyone else, always looking forward to more from you. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"will your whispers be my salvation" what a great line |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Friend Ref, thanks so much for the touch. ___________ ms slick, thank you for stopping by, you sooth my gravel to smooth |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
You know, I love this poem backwards and forwards. aziza |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms az, thank you for looking back and then returning to look forward again |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Nicely done Daark. Today the sun is shining golden amber hues against a beautiful blue sky, it started rather dreary but has evolved into gorgeous skies... hope the day has gotten brighter there for you D.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms gs..it is lovely out..when I close my eyes ..thanks |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Damn yet again - your style, imagery and talent blows me away....You're so frieken' cool yanno that?  Love this, it's another keeper~ Melissa~ Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lots of questions, and I would imagine, lots of answers, verbally and otherwise.... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
the sun has left me now it will be dark dark dark all night long like this Stranger |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms honey, thank you little friend _____________ bromag, thanks amigo, most humble thanks _______________ ladyone, this stranger enjoys your eyes, thank you |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Very strong poetic presentation "will your eyes be the seeping dawn that warms the wallowed womb where I was buried in the last time by a woman's wanton without fantasy" My favorite stanza |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Friend D.L. Thanks so much for the review, much appreciated |
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