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william foos
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0 posted 2006-09-21 07:56 PM



the night collapses into day
leaving my spirit breathless
gasping for the reality
of my sence of being
should i re-look at my soul
to know the why of me
i must serch for the reason
that this earth is keeping
answers from my mind
as the day rebirths the night

i see what i write and write what i see

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-09-21 08:03 PM


"should i re-look at my soul
to know the why of me"

always

The Lady
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2 posted 2006-09-21 10:39 PM




"as the day rebirths the night"

nice write william...
it flows


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3 posted 2006-09-21 11:31 PM


I was just about to slip you an email....when it dawned on me, darn if they're not intentional.....I just love to lern a new trick!

And the poem, nicely done with or without. Methinks I'll be looking forward to your poetic deeds!

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Martie
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4 posted 2006-09-22 12:03 PM


Hi William....I'm glad to see you back...

That first and last line are fresh and perfectly placed.  I also like the searching mood.  

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