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A Run-On Thought
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A Run-On Thought |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Awaking to the darkness the age of being taken where the sweetness loses its flavor and the thirst for what use to be has dried the sounds into a fantasy of words where the best is minimized and the open window has become slight where the cycle of life pedals faster going nowhere as time... just is. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Yes Maureen, I agree time just is....enjoying your thoughts and feeling them here.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the way you described this feeling good to read you again M |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Beautifully worded description of a feeling that defies description. You did it so well! Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"where the cycle of life pedals faster going nowhere as time... just is." Love your wording here Maureen. Much enjoyed this piece. Hugs~Nancy ~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Donna, good to be reading you. I have limited time...mostly of choice. So very tired from my day that I spend a short time on here to read a few. Dixie, I see you are back. Thank you and I hope you get settled in and are happy. Sandra, Thank you for taking the time to respond. I appreciate it. Nancy, I was thinking this morning how far I have come and yet I am still "nowhere" at the moment. Love this of yours "~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~"  M |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
time really is just is when youre home stuck inside your head...nice write Swinging the Dead in this Free Fall you call life, Swinging the Dead on a Deathride |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When the thought is this good... let it run. *S* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"where the best is minimized and the open window has become slight where the cycle of life pedals faster going nowhere as time... " M-Lady....this is SOME FINE WRITING. *hugs*....jo |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kinda reminds me of Rod Serling and the Twilight Zone.... a very good write. Thanx M. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
as time... just is. I feel this way too, Maureen. It's good to read you, Sweetie. Hugs, Ethel |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
magnificant write, really enjoyed this |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
This has deep meaning for me, thanks. "where the cycle of life pedals faster going nowhere as time... just is." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you for taking the time to read and respond...for me at the moment and those to come time...just is M (even that speeding ticket I received...) |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Softly said, as always. Bob |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a naked run-on thought? Isn't that streaking?  I loved everything about this. The opening line is a nice twist, even if you meant it literally, I like it as a moment of awareness of an ominous situation. You could have said you saw the light, but that is fairly cliche', but putting it that way conveyed your tone very aptly, and you managed to maintain a stoic acceptance through out. Your second stanza underscored the reluctant reality, and you did an outstanding job of noting the passing of time, even as it seems to stand still. One of your best, mo! (and my apologies for not responding to your e mail--but you know how I am...sigh, but I will work on doing beterwith thatl) But brava on the success of this'n. I only wish I could add a firefly to light your night.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I just spent 3 hours on an off reading the CA forum discussions. I started this day (my only day off in the total of 70) with a headache and believe me, I still have it...but I am grateful Karen, for your critiquing of my poem...although I would never even attempt to place it in CA. So I thank you for taking the time to understand me... As always,  M oh and that goes for you too Robert, M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sheesh  Maybe I just need to shake it off? Sorry, the critique mindset got to be habitual thinking. That happened so quick it's kinda skeery.  I'll be good, and hey? I meant every word. When I can "see" someone in a poem, it's my very favorite thing. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I loved it, Karen..I mean that..it made me think a bit today..all of it, the discussions in CA and your words... now I am off to sit in the beautiful fall sunshine and warm my body up if not my mind. hugs and thanks again M |
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banished_fairy Junior Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 31Happy in H*ll, PA |
Daydreaming explained to the masses. I loved swirling the words around in my head, waiting to see where you would take my thoughts. And my journey ended right where it began. Thank you. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I know this feeling well. |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
That's a great run-on thought! |
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