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il finit (charcoal man and his lady)

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The Lady
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0 posted 09-17-2006 09:44 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Lady



he sits in vieux carre    
head between hands  
staring at dusty feet        
breathing stale air

calypso is dead
rotting in his lapel
Panama droops on weary knee

cathedral bells
ship horns
trumpets
giggling women
sing
café au lait
perfume
cross his smelling
still he sits
empty carapace

quick fresh breeze  
fingers his heart  
lady’s voice?  
mais oui

he turns  
raw silk skirt      
slit side    
familiar  leg  
lady laugh    

on her arm    
a fat boy    
round legs    
arms    
rosy lip bent to milk bubbles      
dark shadow hair      
tiny hand        
reaches for breast    
no no no  
lady grabs fist  
red lip bends to mother love    
milk teeth flash    
she kisses a soft cheek    
tickles a round tummy      
deep
heart deep in love        

charcoal man’s eyes seek hers    
she turns away  
   lady  
she does not answer

   lady  
   my heart pains      
she smiles    
oui    
I know darlin’
qui m'a fait souffert aussi long temps
pour ça
I suffered so long
    
   please lady
   just look  
lady’s breath is wrapped in stop    
heart does not beat right  
red lip bends to moment  
   lady please
   my heart aches

she craves arms around him
head in shallow valley between his shoulders  
smelltaste of him

he holds shaky hand  
toward her  
dry mouth whispers
   lady
she reaches for breath    
finds none  
her heels turn  
she looks at him  
lost again  

ah mon homme
allons  à la maison
let’s go
home
ol ‘gator will think
we gone forever

his smile is small
weary
   the chouchoot
   mon fils?  
red lip bends to shy smile
lady twirls her pretty self
laughs
oui papa
buy a cigar for you
and a noonie for your chouchoot

charcoal man  
slips Panama to boy’s tiny head  
kisses lady’s red lip
  when he can have cigar beb?
lady slaps at charcoal man
misses
mon rogue!

il commence
il finit
© Copyright 2006 Kate - All Rights Reserved
The Lady
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1 posted 09-17-2006 09:50 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



it's over
I want to thank all of you for your encouragement
Karilea for her "noodge"
my muse for the frenzy of it all...

I have enjoyed myself
Sunshine
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2 posted 09-17-2006 09:51 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine



Oh, well done!

Smiling here...not the ending I expected...

but the ending most deserved!



The Lady
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3 posted 09-17-2006 09:55 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady


thank you Karilea
not the ending I expected either
but it wanted to be written
that way
I obliged...  
Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 09-17-2006 09:56 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

  Oh Kate I have shivers of delight at this magnificent ending you have come up with!! A pefect ending, you had me from the first post to this incedibly fantastic finale.  One can but only whisper...

brava......

with courtseys, from one lady, to another...
HUGS  
The Lady
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5 posted 09-17-2006 10:03 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady

I'm glad you enjoyed it Donna
couldn't bring myself to hurt either
of them
and the chouchoot's so darned adorable...
thank you dear Lady
hugs
aziza
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6 posted 09-18-2006 02:24 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

Thank you.

Thank you for the gift of Charcoal Man and his Lady.

Thank you for breathing life into them

Thank you for making me smile and laugh -- always delighting in them

Thank you for ending as you did.

Thank you for you.

aziza
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7 posted 09-18-2006 07:15 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

ladyone..nice ending..perhaps she will dance from time to time at the rowdy dow..
Earth Angel
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8 posted 09-18-2006 10:14 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

I applaud you, Lady Kate! This magnolia series kept one's attention from the inception to the denouement. A class 'A' piece of writing! Totally captivating and compelling!

Love & Southern Light,
Linda
Martie
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9 posted 09-18-2006 12:28 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Lady...the color and magic of this series plays like a movie...could be a movie, but who, who could play the roles as well as poetry?  
Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


10 posted 09-18-2006 02:06 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

When all the superlatives have been used..
may I simply say Brava! And thank you!

I may not have replied to each in this series,
but I have been here, awaiting the next post..
my eyes searching your name.

Superb writing!!  
Hugs~Nancy

~Autumn, the year's last, loveliest smile~

sewasham
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11 posted 09-18-2006 03:10 PM       View Profile for sewasham   Email sewasham   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sewasham

What and unexpected finale, but well done. I've enjoyed this all the way through. Take care and Have fun. Steve

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12 posted 09-18-2006 04:51 PM       View Profile for seraphin   Email seraphin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for seraphin

Brava! Brava!
Thank you for a wonderous journey! You are a magnificent writer.

Sandra
iliana
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13 posted 09-18-2006 05:14 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

It just can't be over....oh, well.....all's well that ends well, and this most certainly did!  Wonderful work, Kate!  *hugs*....jo
ThisDiamond
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14 posted 09-18-2006 08:32 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Kate,
I have sat nightly, savoring each installment of your talented heart.  This was magnificent! The entire journey was just magnificent!
TD
The Lady
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15 posted 09-18-2006 09:22 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



thank you for your sweetness  aziza
and for your witty replies…
it’s been fun

yes Stranger
she will put on her sunshine dress
have a big time at the rowdy dow …
while he takes his chouchoot
frog giggin’
thank you for all of it

thank you for being there
Linda Angel…
love and beaucoup southern light to you…

thank you for coming along Martie…
in poetry
people are always as we like
in our mind’s eye, yes?

thank you for being there Nancy
I felt your eyes…

unexpected finale to me too Steve
I didn’t know she was enceinte
till she took to her bed
thank you for being with them…

thank you Sandra!
and thanks for your encouragement…
one night I kept him home
just for you

I think it’s far from over jo  
the last part is yours to write…
thank you for being with us faithfully
hugs

thank you TD
I am happy you took the journey
with us...
Kate

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16 posted 09-18-2006 11:50 PM       View Profile for Spike Daft   Email Spike Daft   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spike Daft's Home Page   View IP for Spike Daft

Again, your imagery and way with words and rythm astound me. A wonderful piece, though I am sorry to see the series end.

And thank you so much also for your kind comments on my poems.

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The Lady
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17 posted 09-18-2006 11:53 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



thank you Andrea
and you're welcome...
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18 posted 03-27-2011 01:37 AM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

I don't want it to end.

Kate, thank you.

Love
Alison
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