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comin' home (charcoal man and his lady)

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The Lady
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0 posted 09-14-2006 10:53 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Lady

charcoal man slides polished feet
‘round bayou  
oversteps seeps  
rainy night slipstream  

no ouaouaron croakin’  
no ol ‘gator eyes shinin’
no buzzin’ moustique at door
only charcoal man  
and a mean rain  

slips screen door open  
quiet like
lifts Panama on nail
patchouli fills empty rooms  
searching for lady heart
nothing
  
he quick steps back to porch  
feels rough of quilt meaning
rain on bare head  
hollers loud
   oo ye yi
   cold cold
   j'ai fai une grosse erreur
   where you at
   mon jeannette?

charcoal man knows
where she at
he knows comin’ home
ain that easy
this time

© Copyright 2006 Kate - All Rights Reserved
Magicmystery
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1 posted 09-14-2006 11:16 PM       View Profile for Magicmystery   Email Magicmystery   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Magicmystery's Home Page   View IP for Magicmystery

This one and Au Revoir are a matched set!

Well written.

Sherry

     
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thank you Sherry!  

Dark Stranger
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ladyone, seems home is not always
where the heart is..but then again
if she is shoppin' she will be home'
with the hungry edges soon..enjoyed it
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


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...and then?



LeeJ
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5 posted 09-15-2006 08:24 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

know this feeling well

wonderful write
Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 09-15-2006 08:45 AM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Oh I can't wait for the next one, this is the perfect follow up to the previous! Excellent Kate!
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Your words are not just words, they are living mots. This reader does not merely peruse them ~ I experience them.

Your talent continues to shine with this captivating series, Lady Kate!

Love & Southern Light,
Linda
The Lady
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yes Stranger
the heart can
(and does) live in many places
you are such a rascal…
what you reckon she’s shoppin’ for
dominican leaf or habana?

and then Karilea  
we shall see…  
methinks he’s in trouble  

thank you LeeJ…

thank you Gentle Spirit
I can’t wait either…  

Linda you are so kind
thank you for the infusion of southern light  
a real gift…
love to you
JamesMichael
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Enjoyed...James
The Lady
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thank you James... Kate

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about all I can is...wow! Not only is it excellently written but it swims in the flavor of the setting. This is one you can feel as you read.....dynamite work!
The Lady
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oh Balladeer
thank you so much!
iliana
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13 posted 09-18-2006 05:11 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Think I read these out of order, but no matter.  Each a marvel!
The Lady
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doesn’t matter the order jo
thank you…

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Touches me in here (taps chest)

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