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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2006-09-13 02:17 AM

I starve me to the least of pang
just a flat note of the hand

extended

fancy dancing
as
petulance

releases us

with just a half note
lidded as
if the quill had much to drink
a quiver and a sad sad smile-
drums of non existances

banging
dangling my verbs
and participled versed curse

webbed

signs of promises
in the quarter of the nine
in one learned mile of mine

and struts
of discomfortune laugh

buzzing like a bad bad girl

I wish I hadn't known this world
I wish that I could pull white sheets
up above my shoulder and
I turn my back to dream

and these

are simple nods of courtesy

with a wink of heresy

trace of grace of wind and scarf

pointing with a toe and stress

on the tambourine a jing

jing-jing-jing

I'm listening

to the sound of
crisp clean sheets

muscled by the very lies
of ankles held together tight

and I

am weary of the dream--

buzzing

like a bad bad girl...

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

1 posted 2006-09-13 02:58 AM

"banging
dangling my verbs
and participled versed curse

webbed

signs of promises
in the quarter of the nine
in one learned mile of mine"

I can't decide whether to grin or cry...still working on figuring this one out completely....jojo

Obscurity
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since 2003-12-04

Posts 153
In A Melancholic Dream

2 posted 2006-09-13 03:08 AM

I feel like this almost every day. It's sad, yet comforting to release the feelings of ones self. I loved the poem very much so

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2006-09-13 08:21 AM

serenity,
These feeling like the breeze touch me every day.

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2006-09-13 09:36 AM

bad is my favorite candy serene one
enjoyed

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2006-09-17 09:41 PM

with just a half note
lidded as
if the quill had much to drink
a quiver and a sad sad smile-
drums of non existances

banging
dangling my verbs
and participled versed curse

webbed

signs of promises
in the quarter of the nine
in one learned mile of mine

and struts
of discomfortune laugh

...

I'm listening

...

~*~

Just when I think you're in one corner
you turn around and wink.

You are the epitomy of spirited hope...
and a candle in every window.

You never, ever, let us down.

If nothing, you lift.

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

6 posted 2006-09-17 11:13 PM

I like this. ::waves::

-Juju

-<>-~-<>-~-<>-
* Juju *
-<>-~-<>-~-<>-

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

7 posted 2006-09-17 11:26 PM

Wow! Serenity, this is just incredible! What can I say?

misC

luminosity
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since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

8 posted 2006-09-20 04:29 PM

I don't know what it is about your poetry, its like you reach a part of me that before I read you had no words...and after, I am not sure I understand the depths of me that you reached, but there is a comfort that filters in just knowing that you feel it too...
ok...confused enough?...lumin curtsies and leaves

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

9 posted 2006-09-20 05:34 PM

Thank you all so much for reading me.

I don't write as much as I used to--and after reading a few comments about what proper poetry is, I tried to quit altogether.

I seem to have problems with relinquishing bad habits though.

So thank you all for indulging me in my journal entries--and I promise I will continue my quest to abandon myself entirely so I can write better.

Thanks to you all with my love and gratitude.

Refugee
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since 2006-08-04

Posts 97

10 posted 2006-09-22 12:25 PM

I, for one thouroughly enjoy your work. you should not change one thing in the name of propriety.

redheart angrybraids
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since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

11 posted 2006-10-17 09:24 AM

it flows like a song, a sad song, but a good one.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

12 posted 2006-10-17 11:19 PM

"I'm listening

to the sound of
crisp clean sheets

muscled by the very lies
of ankles held together tight"

write better than this?
how?

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

13 posted 2006-10-17 11:27 PM

my dear lady serenity ~sigh~
you can spit on the page and then simply leave an exclamation point! and I'd still read you
far more often than any 'proper' poets of propriety...though I'm not sure who they might be as I likely never read them

besides, what Sunshine said is true
you are UPLIFTING, and all us dumb boobs are thankful for your presents and presence

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

14 posted 2006-10-18 01:51 AM

Here's another dumb boob

that fully agrees. I always enjoy reading you - mind you - sometimes I don't always get it but so what? You do and that is the main reason for writing right?

Waste not a second ~ Carpe' Diem

Strathaniel
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since 2006-10-17

Posts 12

15 posted 2006-10-18 03:15 AM

Brilliant!!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

16 posted 2006-10-18 12:13 PM

Karen lovey (I hope you don't mind if I steal that term of endearment)...you astound me...I want to write like you, but since I can only write like me, I at least want to read the things held as you do, within that amazing soul and heart.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

17 posted 2006-10-18 01:45 PM

Ser, I wanted to say something about how this made me feel..
but, I can't find the words..

So, I'll just sit here a spell
and listen to the sound
of your tambourine
jing, jing, jing.

Love you lady~

Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

18 posted 2006-10-18 01:55 PM

Karen,
I have no idea how you do this. And I read and re-read because you stretch my feeble mind. But mostly I see it if I dream.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

CastleGuard
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since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

19 posted 2006-10-18 02:39 PM

I am with Larry on this....LOL.

serenity - to say 'proper' poetry...

...is like saying 'proper' wind... or a 'proper' ray of sunshine...

To each a different inspiration, a different meaning.

I think your poetry is 'proper' for you..

...even though, most times goes over my head...or thru it... LOL

Don't stop.

CG

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