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Mocking Our Failure
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Mocking Our Failure |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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Mocking Our Failure I was waiting to see you in the flattering light of late afternoon, the light that passes through the harshness of mid-day, the harshness that you had so recently escaped. I heard your voice calling to me but you did not come close enough to see and I could not hold nor stop the setting of the sun, golden as it was. Then you were gone. Were we both so hidden in so many long shadows that we knew not which way to run? The growing darkness is blinding me now and all I am able to see, rising are two reflected faces, merged in a smudge of tears set to haunt this endless night. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You are an artist because I saw a canvas with two distorted and blurred images....mostly in blues. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
This is so beautiful... tearfully so...  M |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Krawdad The passage of time and wanting to hold on...so poignantly lit this poem. |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
man...i just love everything you write! hugs, g "Home..is for free expression, not for good impression..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"The growing darkness is blinding me now and all I am able to see, rising are two reflected faces, merged in a smudge of tears set to haunt this endless night." ~ Aww, Kraw... Your watercolour memories have stirred some of my own... Your poetic soul drips pure emotion down the page. Lovin' hug, EA |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kraw...very well said...could feel it with ya. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oh my, this was utterly poetic and could feel every line....the pain, the despair, the frustration...you have penned disappointment well.... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
each day that passes the shadow lengthens in darkness and light |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
I felt the darkness in this poem. Turning up brightness on my monitor. Thanks for sharing your poem; it was much enjoyed! Poetry is just the evidence of life. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh this is a beautiful write! you are a very talented poet!!  Be well Roniece |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I sure am glad this one came back up I wouldn't have wanted to miss it |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you really must post more my darling we miss you sooooooooo much !!! |
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tek Junior Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 32Austin, USA |
awesome. very nicely done. when i read the title, i thought it was a piece about the American media. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
remarkable work Krawdad |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hello m'friend! ~sigh~ Love's heartbeat is heard and felt within these words. You've penned the essence of the incredible sadness, the empty feeling that accompanies losing a spiritmate's connection. But it's good to read your heartbeat again. May your heart find love again! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I was waiting to see you" hmmmm...yes that is a breath catcher... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
There are times when I can only hope looking through tears leads to rainbows. ...an exquisitely written poem that makes my eyes well, too. ~ K. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is so delicately beautiful...well done sir...very well done... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Wow. The sky breathes inside your poetry. Even the dark moves and touches others. Very poignant piece of ache, my friend. Warm hugs, Reg |
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