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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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. One by lost one, thread by shopworn thread, depleting by degrees the finite, I feel you shedding images of me, and you, and we two as us. Just as muscle memories keep the body from falling through step after awkward step, just as brainstem habits force lungs more dead than alive to cling to the hope of breathing, the heart binds threads of love long after logic demurs, until in time it stops. ©2006 by icebox . |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sir Box of Ice ~ I found myself winding down with your vividly descriptive words of a dying love. Felt this to the core. I have been there. Thankfully, I'm where I'm at now! There is life after the death of a love relationship! ~ and at any age!  Loving hug, EA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
After spending some time in the past six years trying wrap my brain around the concept of death and loss--this is absolutely one of the best poems I have read regarding what I have now termed the "deathwatch"--that would be when people die slow, as opposed to nauseating shocks I have had when people I knew died very quickly. Or maybe I just got the news very quickly, eh? On any account, read literally, this is so real. Read metaphorically, it is just as real, but can be applied to just about anything the reader would like it to be--just as fine poetry should. On another note, it also makes me constant state of "tired" a frightening thing too. So...hugs, sweetheart. You are, without a doubt, in my top five favorite Pip poets, and have been from the first poem you ever posted.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
right to the heart of the matter you always reach deep inside |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
Wow ! From dying love...to the "subtle" ways of the reptilian brain. So many corners to explore. An astounding piece of work ! :: bows :: |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
icebox - such a sad poem but I suppose more particularly because I can relate so very well. Those threads of love are pretty damn useless when the mind (logic) wages battle. I've missed your words here lately. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
LOL at Uriah's comment, and agree with all of the above.  ...jo |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The levels you reach when you write are often times so much deeper than the usual read is. And, it's not even what you say, but how you express it that really rocks my mind. and? thats a good thing. Truly, enjoyed this fine piece of work and will only add, a quiet amen to what K said. Brava. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox I'm reminded of the lyrics "I know nothing stays the same"..can't remember who wrote or sang it or the rest of the words. Your poem so poignantly reminds me of loss and the ache of time's changes. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
missed reading you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Martie...that song is by Carly Simon I think. Coming Around Again is the name. It was on a movie but I can't remember which one though I know it was a darn good movie. I know nothing stays the same but if you're willing to play the game, it will be coming around again I believe in love who knows where or when but it's coming around again good song...thanks for the reminder  |
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