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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2006-09-06 09:48 PM



Sky

In the purple shades of twilight
'Neath the polka dotted starlight
Comes a peace as night time lowers a final curtain to the floor
All my troubles seem to wither
As the shadows slip and slither
God’s own splendor drawing hither to erase a scathing sore
‘Tis the sky and nothing more

What design does nature render
To a spirit frail and tender
That would change a dire moment to the wealth of golden ore?
What do gleaming planets offer
Into mankind’s treasured coffer
But a universe to proffer splendors it has shown before?
These are stars and nothing more

Through the mist of winter storming
Came this show without forewarning
All the heavens ablaze with constellations shining shore to shore
On a night unlike another
What power is this that came to smother
All the chaos that had plagued my spirit only hours before?
Omnipotence, and nothing more


Elizabeth Santos

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Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA
1 posted 2006-09-06 10:01 PM


Dear Liz,
If I may still call you that, thanks for this. I thought your whole piece to be well constructed to your subject, and your sincerity lends a touch my own work seems to be lacking of late. An excellent write.
Doc

Kal525
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since 2005-12-20
Posts 26

2 posted 2006-09-06 10:42 PM


I liked this poem as well... your rhyming doesn't detract from the subject and is well placed.
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2006-09-07 06:55 AM


I know you sunshine, and am blessed by the knowing! Your a beautiful little book of rhyme, a potter with high quality design, natural skill, sensitivity and cognitive sketches, carve in the clay of poetry and life.    

Your words of song are extremely aesthetic, rich and diverse with imagination, as we poets continue our search for meaning within ourselves, finding our place in life.  

You, dear poetess enrich the reader.  To create with words, is to create within ourselves...spreading framework for others to receive.  Sing my friend, sing....

Luv You

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4 posted 2006-09-07 12:30 PM


Stellar!  
Earth Angel
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5 posted 2006-09-07 02:29 PM


Liz, I do believe that you have even eclipsed yourself!

I can do no better than jo has written in her response! Her words have to make you smile ~ and deservedly so, Lady Santos!

Beauty flows from you like sap from a sugar maple in springtime!

Loving hug,
Linda

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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6 posted 2006-09-07 03:30 PM


Yes - what LeeJ said!
Terrific write!  

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2006-09-07 08:43 PM


Elizabeth  
A moments open of the door
Of the core of nothing more.
Excellent

arwen54
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since 2006-09-07
Posts 13
Welland, Ontario
8 posted 2006-09-07 09:03 PM


"What design does nature render
To a spirit frail and tender
That would change a dire moment to the wealth of golden ore?"

ah, what design indeed!

excellent words, beautifully written and very inspiring...

cheers,
Karen

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