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Kal525
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since 2005-12-20
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0 posted 2006-09-05 06:15 PM



This piece was Inspired by a poem I recently read by Rudyard Kipling entitled "If."  It is easily one of the most beautiful poems I have read and I encourage all of you to google it.
http://www.lepoeme.com/content/view/51/70/

Should your nervous eyes tremble in the sadness of goodbye
Cry deeply, for your tears hold the memory
Of every dance in mine

Should those tears hit the ground without a soul to watch
Cry slowly, for the fall holds the memory
Of our timeless rise

Should the ground tremble beneath your falling tears
Cry gently, for the earth holds the memory
Of the harvest reaped

Should your eyes turn dry with no tears to bare
Cry not, for in their absence
You will find, my love
That I am there.

© Copyright 2006 Kal525 - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2006-09-05 08:16 PM


An outstanding write.
Welcome to Passions.
TD

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
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2 posted 2006-09-05 08:26 PM


Welcome to Pip. Much enjoyed this, nicely done.
The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
3 posted 2006-09-05 10:33 PM



know Kipling's poem well
Kal...
it has inspired a beautiful write here

welcome

Enchantress
Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
4 posted 2006-09-05 10:37 PM


A wonderful write.
Very much enjoyed the read.
Hugs~Nancy

Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again..and again....

seraphin
Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004
Michigan
5 posted 2006-09-05 11:25 PM


Your inspiration is without a doubt, my favorite written work. You have used it well, and written your own masterpiece.
Well done, Poet.

Sandra

Kal525
Junior Member
since 2005-12-20
Posts 26

6 posted 2006-09-05 11:49 PM


Thank you all for the kind comments.  I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.  I'm sure I will enjoy many of yours (if I can ever find time to get on these forums more than once every two months).  As for the inspiration - it is only growing on me as I read it over and over again.

FNG
Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 477

7 posted 2006-09-08 05:35 AM


This is very touching...

will think of your poetry everytime i cry...lolx

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