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XOx Uriah xOX
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0 posted 2006-09-04 05:25 AM



Lee said he felt buried back when he lived at home.
He took the anger he carried and started to roam.
And so LIFE began and he lived hard and fast
To finish the race...
before the starting gun's blast.

Day turns to night and night turned to Lee,
with the eyes of a shark in a dark dead sea.
When he was a child it filled him with fright.
He must have known then...
He'd fall in love with its bite.

Misguided youth with directions not followed.
Staggered in neon and in darkness got swallowed.
His cries went unheard beneath all the shouts
Of the souls on the streets...
Who'd been chewed and spit out.

A bobble head brother with a ghostly complexion
Gasped for air as he smothered beneath self rejection.
We tried to throw off the blanket, too heavy to heft
I tried to reach out and yank it...
But nothing was left.

Just the husk of a soul that got washed away in its tears.
A human cicada...
at seventeen years.

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2006-09-04 08:08 AM



What do they know, when so young...
only a tortured soul.

Well written, Larry.  Thank you for
the eye-opener.


Earth Angel
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2 posted 2006-09-04 11:38 AM


The kind of tragic "story" that rips one's heart out!

You told it well. In actuality, I was singing this 'ballad' as if I were Johnny Cash.

XO
EA


Martie
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3 posted 2006-09-04 12:44 PM


Why,
at that bright side of twenty,
those great times
of good and plenty
you find a child who grew
crooked instead of true
remember,
he was
recorded
filed
and left
himself alone.




Bonnie j
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since 2003-06-27
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4 posted 2006-09-04 12:59 PM


Our babies are so restless. Looking for something unable to find. Only finding more young in the same state of mind. Looking for something and unable to grasp that elusive thread of beauty.

Also I wrote a poem called NO VICTOR to go with your poem TO THE VICTOR. You gave me an idea and so I went with it.
Hugs
BonBon

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2006-09-04 01:28 PM


Uriah
A river of tears
And so many beers

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (09-04-2006 10:37 PM).]

seraphin
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6 posted 2006-09-04 03:32 PM


I've wept for you, and with you 3 times this day. Pain greets pain with salty fury.

Sandra

exhale
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7 posted 2006-09-04 06:17 PM


Day turns to night and night turned to Lee,
with the eyes of a shark in a dark dead sea.
When he was a child it filled him with fright.
He must have known then...
He'd fall in love with its bite.



Your writing is beautiful in such a tragic way.

This was absolutely wonderful.

The Lady
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8 posted 2006-09-04 09:45 PM




excellent
Uriah...

LeeJ
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9 posted 2006-09-06 10:55 AM


there were so many excellent lines in here, I wanted to high light every single one...

mezmorizing write/right....
well structured and so so true....

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10 posted 2006-09-26 11:25 PM


Oh wow.....just plain, old-fashioned WOW! This one hits close to home for a lot of us, I'm afraid. Wow anyway.

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