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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2006-09-03 08:20 AM


Rewrite:


The Mire of Retire

My aging feet have hit quagmire
In the mire of retire
And though the wheels still spin a bit
It’s mostly with the fuel of wit

My quickened pace has slowed to crawl
That is within the overall
The energy to stay the race
Now limited in time and space

And though the search is still suspense
The feelings are much less intense
But still I ache to carry on
That feel within has never gone

A sloth that moves a lesser rate
A turtle at a slower state
But feelings run me just as high
That seeks the purple rose of why

While vivid turns a subtle gray
And footsteps weigh of yesterday



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Sunshine
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1 posted 2006-09-03 09:48 AM



Keep that wit fueled, and you'll
continue to have a long way to go.

Good morning, Sy!








Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2006-09-03 10:00 AM


Sunshine
I'll try

Magnus
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3 posted 2006-09-03 12:11 PM


Me thinks you are not only trying, but you
are doing as well....Yeah, we do tend to
slow down a little..Sorta like when I get
in and out of the car...it sux!

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2006-09-03 12:27 PM


Magnus
That's the feeling. LOL

Martie
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5 posted 2006-09-03 02:34 PM


Sy

You run wild though your feet don't know
within is where you still rule the show


Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2006-09-03 02:53 PM


Martie
You are so wise.

Honeybunch
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7 posted 2006-09-03 04:06 PM


Oh, yes, you write for many but there's nothing to "fear" as long as the spirit is willing.  We just dance a different way but dance we do!
Bonnie j
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8 posted 2006-09-03 04:16 PM


I have been holding on to 39 for several years now and it is true the ole body is slower. When I sit for a long time OH! MY!
Ohhhhhhhhhhh! Groan. I retired earlier then some, but went back to work. Let me tell you getting up so darn early tain't so easy anymore. More groans...... But in retirement I started to write, photography and have been teaching myself graphic design. Taking day trips. Now I have the time to work in the garden. Teach computers to seniors. I only knew how to turn the dumb thing on when I retired. Now I work part-time and what I think is so cool I get paid vacation time.
Just sharing what I was able to do.
See Ya
Hugs
BonBon

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2006-09-03 08:24 PM


Honeybunch
And dance we do.

Bonnie j
Well it looks like you solved your problem.

Bonnie j
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10 posted 2006-09-03 08:32 PM


Yepper just another stage in your life.
Enjoy. You have your health, maybe it wobbles a little...LOL. You have an active mind from what I read of your poetry. Do you live by the ocean? Enjoy her beauty, her fragrance, her sound. Smile at folks and say hello. For my birthday the girls at work gave me balloons and a cake and decorated my desk. I put ribbons on the balloons and at the bus stop I gave them to the small little ones. Smiles galore.
Just many ideas running around in my silly head.
Hugs BonBon

SmartChick
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11 posted 2006-09-03 10:10 PM


I know the feeling well.
Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2006-09-04 09:14 AM


BonBon
Wobbles, exzctly LOL

SmartChick
Thank you dear.

Larry C
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13 posted 2006-12-09 10:59 PM


Sy,
SO it is the wit,
That is the fuel of it.
And he is a sage,
Becuase he conquered age.

But it seems too:

It is the romance,
Even if feet don't dance.
It is the gleem in the eye,
That still refuses to die.

It is all of this,
That brings us bliss.
It is the one true guy,
That we all know and love as Sy.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

rwood
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14 posted 2006-12-10 01:04 AM


A great read, darlin'. So you ain't a bit done. I also love Larry's reply. Perfectly said. Keep smiling. It takes years away and makes people wonder about you.

love,
Reg

ethome
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15 posted 2006-12-10 02:59 AM


Sy
You haven't lost your touch in the least......Bottomless barrel of kind and persuasive thoughts in that heart of yours.
Good work!

Eric

Beatrice Boyle
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16 posted 2006-12-10 03:20 AM


Welcome to the club Sy.

Like rare wine...we improve with age. (Except that by the time we have the time to get up and go...our get up and go has gone!)

Bea


Grandma Bea

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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17 posted 2006-12-10 05:42 AM


I like, I like!   RDB
Seymour Tabin
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18 posted 2006-12-10 08:44 AM


Larry C
Thank you my friend.

ethome
There is still some at the bottom of the barrel

Bea
LoL you got that right.

Roniece,
Thank you, thank you. Talking about old age, I forgot I wrote that. LOL

sandgrain
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19 posted 2006-12-10 05:47 PM


Oh how I hate that slowing down part.  My mind keeps telling me in the morning that I can accomplish so much more than my body allows.  Ever fall asleep watching the 6 PM news? LOL  

I enjoyed this piece.


    Rae

Seymour Tabin
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20 posted 2006-12-10 08:05 PM


sandgrain
LOL I fall asleep during TV at anytime.
Thank you for the read and comment.

The Lady
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21 posted 2006-12-11 01:01 AM




Sir Sy

your fuel of wit
can take you far

well done Sir...


Seymour Tabin
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22 posted 2006-12-11 08:00 AM


Lady
Your wit is the soul of your shoes.

ivordavies
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23 posted 2007-01-14 01:56 PM


Seymour,

Having a quick look around as I've just joined this site.  I am amazed that rhyming poets seem to be in fashion here!

I tried retiring once, couldn't afford it (still a youngster at 61), But I find i can still give most of my staff and managers a run for their money.  I just have to ignore the odd (really odd) pain or two!

Only read a couple of your poems up to now but it's nice to find a poet of your caliber,  especially when he takes the time to read my meager offerings.

Look forward to getting the time to read more of your work,

have fun,

Ivor

  

The moment created this second, is a  moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

Seymour Tabin
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24 posted 2007-01-16 08:15 AM


Ivor
Having fun, I'll do my best. LOL Thank you

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