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Lisey
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0 posted 2006-08-30 01:05 PM



A Terminal Friend!

Sometimes I find it hard seeing through my eyes
seeing the truth of hurt I cause
in my wicked loathing disguise

I see the hate when I look at myself
the evil within my stare
wipe away the mist
my breathing has caused
still everything is unclear!

someone bring me from my shadows
pull me through the rain
tell me why Im on this earth
causing so much pain

I cannot cure
once my heart has kicked in
even if you are a chancer
for my friend dont get to know me!
as I am the human cancer!


Lisa Anne Wilkes

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2006-08-30 03:33 PM


Lisa~

***EDITING HERE***
I apologize for my misinterpretation of your intent ... on a second reading, coupled with your explanation, I now see that you were speaking in the voice of the 'cancer' ... thank you for enlightening me~

Having had cancer claim the life of a young friend of just 22 years of age ... I can surely feel your pain~
Again, I apologize~
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****My original wrong interpretation -****

This reeks of self-loating ...~
I'm sure there is proven research to cure this type of 'cancer'~
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[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (08-30-2006 05:40 PM).]

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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2006-08-30 03:37 PM


we are all your friends
please count on us forever
your terminal friends

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Lisey
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3 posted 2006-08-30 03:43 PM


Awww its not self loathing!! i wrote this once i found out that my cousin plus my aunty got diagnosed with Cancer! unfortunatly my cousin past away at the young age of 22 and my aunty well she was ok for 2 yrs but recently its come back but its everywhere....! out looks not looking good im afraid
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4 posted 2006-08-30 05:20 PM



So sorry the outlook is not good Lisey. Your poem is well done.


Neotec
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5 posted 2006-08-30 09:43 PM


nicely done : )
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