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suthern
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0 posted 08-30-2006 12:34 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Lethargic, she lies in the creaking swing
That hugs what shade the yard offers,
Breeze blowing over hot skin only
When one foot makes the effort to push.

Blouse soaked from morning chores
She draws full skirt high between damp thighs
Wishing her Pa would let her wear pants –
She works hard as any man.

Underneath the porch, mama-dog drops
With relief moans into the cooler earth
Settling to soothe her swollen belly
That churns with pup heads eager for birth

Timmy’s down at the swimming hole
Uncaring that not much is left but mud
Reeking with the stench of fish dying
In a stream that’s drying just like the hay

She’ll have to move in just a moment –
Start supper simmering as she feeds the pigs,
So she fans her face as she straightens her clothes
And slides in pool of sweat towards September

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1 posted 08-30-2006 12:50 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Ruth, that was just an incredible movie I just watched, I loved it!  Like you - I am up here "waiting for rain" to cool me down for the first time in years.  Happy Fall to you all.
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Deep in the heart


2 posted 08-30-2006 12:52 PM       View Profile for Interloper   Email Interloper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Interloper

Beautiful!
We are awaiting autumn and you are coming into summer...

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Martie
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3 posted 08-30-2006 01:11 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ruth

That swing, the full skirt and sweat of a woman's labor...so well described.  I loved the photo with feeling you took!!  
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 08-30-2006 03:03 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

suthern
I loved the photo too, well done.
LeeJ
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5 posted 08-30-2006 03:18 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

Ruth,
this was an awesome painting you've colored
Loved the visuals...

hugs to ya and thank you for sharing.
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6 posted 08-30-2006 03:30 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SweetSuthernCharmer~
I'm rooting for 'Pa' to let her wear pants too !

This is so rich in imagery ... moving word-photos~

I've got a little Florida (Ernesto style) rain I can send her way~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Pilgrimage
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7 posted 08-30-2006 03:32 PM       View Profile for Pilgrimage   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pilgrimage

Oh, I like this one.  The scene is sharp and strong, and the use of the skirt and the pregnant dog is subtle but to the point.


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8 posted 08-30-2006 05:03 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



oh! this is hard hitting
and beautifully done
I'm there

Midnitesun
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9 posted 08-30-2006 07:20 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

What a beautifully vivid write!
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10 posted 08-30-2006 07:42 PM       View Profile for wordwizard   Email wordwizard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wordwizard

summer goes so quickly but its memory lingers

Neotec
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nice summer thought and i like the Light of the words
iliana
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12 posted 08-31-2006 02:24 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Suthern gal, you are one heck of a writer.  I could visual this scene so easily....great job and much enjoyed.  *hugs*....jo  (PS....cool weather's comin!)
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Suthern, Enjoyed. Put me in mind of another scene of farm life. Cousin Wes, who loved the farm working hard getting in the hay. Brother Joe who hated farm work lying under a tree.  Here comes Pa to check on the boys.  Quick thinking Joe pours water over his head. Wes still working hard. Pa sees Joe under the tree all wet and says. "Boy,You sure have been working hard today. Sit there and rest, Wes can finish
up". True story. LOL martyjo  
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14 posted 09-01-2006 10:14 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

So graphic, this poem! A different physical sensation in reading each line, and every one feels like I'm right there inside your skin.

I've been missing you, Laura....ol' Ed would like to see poem after poem from you.

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Realms of Light


15 posted 09-01-2006 01:31 PM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

A lazy, hazy, daze...
Your vividly descriptive writing has even got me perpiring in my very cool, air-conditioned home office!

Ye gads, girl! Ya shore knows howta write!!!

I think I'll go take a nap. I'm suddenly feeling very hot and listless.

Loveya!
Linda
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16 posted 09-05-2006 09:46 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

My sincere thanks to each of you... I wasn't sure this would work, but it wouldn't leave me alone. *S* Thank you for receiving it so kindly!
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17 posted 09-05-2006 01:58 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

A most wonderful piece full of vivid imagery!
Well done.
Hugs~Nancy

Now - while the leaves still dance on the wind
While the moon and the clouds come spinning
Will you whisper my name again?
Again...and again... and

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suthern,

   A portrait you have painted here with perfect brushing!  It is so easy to visual the atmosphere, mood, even the old mama dog waiting to drop those pups!  This is an amazing piece of art!  Definitely will add this to your others on my library shelf!

   Take care, suthern gal.

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19 posted 09-20-2006 04:24 PM       View Profile for luminosity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for luminosity

oh wow, do you write this style well...i feel sun soaked and tired right along with the words as they drip down the page
 
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