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Lisey
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since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)

0 posted 2006-08-27 06:06 AM



Hey I'm new i just love to write!!,i posted a comment with one of my poems just now but i cant find it,so im posting it on my own thread hope you like it!.


The Fella In The Empty Chair


an empty playground
with a swinging swing
telephone going with an endless ring

a bottle of milk
still full yet so old

cheese in the fridge
covered in mould

tv still playing
video still running

the air so musky
the smell vile

an old men gone
and hes been there awhile

no family calling
"Dad are you ok!?"
terrible to see someone
dying this way

He's only been gone
a few days
thats all!?!?

sitting in the chair
looking so small

just think of other people
in a situation like his
think of that person
that noone would miss

then one day the old fella
will know
that you'll come knocking
when its time for him to go!


written by lisey

© Copyright 2006 Lisa - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-08-27 08:34 AM


Lisey~
WELCOME to the PiP pages blue~

Enjoyed your poetry~

I saw your post on this link -

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That's okay ... you'll get the hang of it all~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Lisey
Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)
2 posted 2006-08-27 09:39 AM


Awwww thanks!! its different to the forums im used to.....but you guys seem like a good bunch and im up for some constructive crit's!! so fanks for the lovely welcome x
The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
3 posted 2006-08-27 11:05 AM




welcome lisey
I enjoyed this poem
look forward to more...

Lisey
Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)
4 posted 2006-08-27 11:34 AM


Hey ty !! i'l look forward to reading everyones poetry theres so much to get thru but thier really awe inspiring!!
seraphin
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since 2000-09-24
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Michigan
5 posted 2006-08-27 12:02 PM


"He's only been gone
a few days
thats all!?!? "

This touched a very personal chord for me. Replace a few days with a year, and the feeling you captured so well still applies. Welcome to our home. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Sandra

Lisey
Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)
6 posted 2006-08-27 02:06 PM


ty!...some of my poems may not be appropriate for this website tho!? i dont want to get kicked off,as its the first forum ive found,thats caught my attendtion!
Lisey
Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)
7 posted 2006-08-27 02:10 PM


y ty, id love to post some more of my poetry on here its just that im not sure if its suitable and some are dark...not majorly dark but i dont want to risk getting kicked of the forum!!!
Lisey
Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)
8 posted 2006-08-27 02:15 PM


oops didnt think my first post went *Blushes* lol
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2006-08-27 05:30 PM


Lisey, we've many rooms for all sorts of poetry.  I'm sure you'll fit in just about anywhere.  If in doubt of your poem's content, just ask a Moderator.  We're here to help you out.

Welcome to Passions!  Please, check your email for a very special greeting...


aziza
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10 posted 2006-08-28 02:59 AM


Welcome.  I am kind of new too and I think you started off with a bang!  What a moving poem.  

aziza

Lisey
Junior Member
since 2006-08-27
Posts 36
UK (Wales)
11 posted 2006-08-28 04:18 AM


Awwww fanks for the email it was lovely!!! i feel so special!
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Deep in the heart
12 posted 2006-08-28 10:58 AM


Welcome to the blue pages.  
You will like it here

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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