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Klassy Lassy
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0 posted 2006-08-25 03:46 PM


Embraced by a silence now,
old dreams of heated charms
span distant miles remembering
wings within your arms.

You left laughter on my page,
but something in you drew
my life into your circle
and wrote the heart of you.

I wish on a well of vision,
touch the fire of your mind,
burn upon my memory
those moments that were mine.

Pools deepen 'neath my breast,
drown old paths of strife,
for the woman I've become
is bound within this life.

You echo me a legacy...
I'll take it to my grave,
the heart I wrap around you
for the love you gave.

[This message has been edited by Klassy Lassy (08-25-2006 04:27 PM).]

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2006-08-25 03:58 PM


You are one classy lassie! ~ and you sure know how to write poetry!

Keeping the warm memories in our heart, keeps our heart beating longer and more rhythmically.

Loving hug,
EA

Klassy Lassy
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2 posted 2006-08-25 04:26 PM


Earth angel, I love your feathers, how gently they touch!     They are connected directly to your heart...
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Deep in the heart
3 posted 2006-08-25 04:32 PM


Beautifully written

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Klassy Lassy
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4 posted 2006-08-25 05:46 PM


So was yours!  thank you for sharing...
The Lady
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5 posted 2006-08-25 10:51 PM




oh
just perfect Klassy...

"You left laughter on my page"


Klassy Lassy
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6 posted 2006-08-26 02:45 AM


  yes, laughter... thank you.
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7 posted 2006-08-26 11:25 AM


KlassyLassy~

'You left laughter on my page,
but something in you drew
my life into your circle
and wrote the heart of you.'


It wasn't just the laughter ...
but the gentle way you wrapped it up~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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8 posted 2006-08-26 11:43 AM


Pools deepen 'neath my breast,
drown old paths of strife,
for the woman I've become
is bound within this life.

You echo me a legacy...
I'll take it to my grave,
the heart I wrap around you
for the love you gave.

~*~

You echo me a legacy...

Love that line...

and like this poem, a lot!




Munda
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9 posted 2006-08-27 04:51 AM


To remember Love and treasure the memories is indeed "Better to have..."
Wonderful poem.

Klassy Lassy
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10 posted 2006-08-28 02:02 AM


  Yes!  I agree wholeheartedly.  
Klassy Lassy
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11 posted 2006-09-01 11:09 PM


Marge      I love the smiles you leave me, dear heart!  ~ Klassy
Klassy Lassy
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12 posted 2006-09-01 11:10 PM


Sunshine, somehow I missed your comment.  It's always sweet to see your name on my page.  Thank you.
ivordavies
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13 posted 2007-01-11 01:16 PM


Klassy Lassy,

I love poetry that makes me want to get involved.

You echo me a legacy...
I'll take it to my grave,
the heart I wrap around you
for the love you gave.

As another commented 'echo me a legacy' opens your imagination to interpretation which is what all good poetry should do.

Being a newbie to the site I am not sure at what level my own views or feelings are welcome, and I cannot find the 'critic welcome' flag I have read about.

As I said, I love this piece and your last stanza is interpreted by my mind as:

You echo me a legacy...
I'll carry to my grave,
your heart still wrapped inside me
beats with the love you gave.

It is nice to find a Rhyming Poet with a style that allows one to 'melt into the moment' and hopefully I will get a chance to see more of your work.

Have Fun,

Ivor  

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