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Sad_In_Havok712
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0 posted 2006-08-08 12:01 PM



Emotional bullet

Emotional bullet to the brain
Descenting quickly,Becoming insane
Facing reality, No more dreams
The whole world fell apart at the seams....
Your enemy, is Your own master
The ruler of this chaotic Disaster
Bang Bang, Such a loud noise
The victim of such fantasy toys
Face the facts, and live life stone sour
even in the darkest hour
Dead on arrival, is what they said
Deal with it your Friend is dead...

This is a poem I wrote when one of my best friends died... I wrote it when the reality hit me...

I will never see him again...

© Copyright 2006 Sad_In_Havok712 - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2006-08-08 12:45 PM


Sad~

Welcome to PiP~

There is such poignancy to your thoughts~

Thank you for sharing the sad inspire for your piece~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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seraphin
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2 posted 2006-08-08 01:20 PM


Firstly, welcome to pip. The title of your work hits home for far too many. The body of your work, even more so. You did a fantastic job on this. It took courage to write, and I applaud you.

Sandra

Beau de L'air
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3 posted 2006-08-08 01:44 PM


How come I never got a huglet from Margelet? I feel swindled!

"Bang bang , such a noise........toys " are good lines.

The Shadow in Blue
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4 posted 2006-08-08 03:35 PM


*bump*

Firstly,walk to pip Sad_in_Havok712. I really found your piece touching and written well. Sorry for what happenned to you and your b/f.

nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2006-08-08 05:20 PM


"The victim of such fantasy toys"

there is too much of that today...

Welcome~~
M

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6 posted 2006-08-09 09:46 AM


The whole world fell apart at the seams....

It does that... and you wrote the meltdown well! *S*

Welcome to Passions! *S*

LeeJ
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7 posted 2006-08-09 10:06 AM


the reality of today is this happens to often...and I'm so sorry to read that this was something you experienced..so sorry...



this write should go out to the world to see.

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Deep in the heart
8 posted 2006-08-09 10:59 AM


Welcome.  I hope your future work will be a little on the lighter side
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9 posted 2006-08-09 06:55 PM


there i read your poem b/c you told me too and now im glad idid i really liked it im sorry you lost your best friend it hurts a lot.......lucky for me im only losing my best friend for a year......i will look out for more of your poems....good write....
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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