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I Walked Down to the River
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I Walked Down to the River |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I Walked Down to the River I walked down to the river to see where it goes down past the islands and the heavy spruce groves It flowed past the houses, the boats and the cars right by the beaver dam and the gravel sand bars. I can see that the river flows all the way to the sea joining high, crashing waves that could bring you to me I walked down to the river to see where it comes from watched it carrying logs and some trash in the foam The water it swirled and made patterns at my feet the sand warmed my toes and was soft under my seat. I walked down to the river with tears wetting my face gazed into the murky waters to gain my sense of place It sang me a love song about all the things it has seen my eyes opened wide with wonder, my mind filled with dreams. I walked down to the river with my heart in my hands thinking the distance was more than I could possibly stand. It took me a moment for my mind to open and see that feelings can be blinders, keeping truth far from me I can see that the river flows all the way to the sea and if I look hard enough I see your love reaching to me. aziza |
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davidmerriman Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 123Dallas, TX |
nothing offensive to me, but why is the narrator crying? the tears seem to come out of nowhere. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
wonderful, aziza I see the tears as part of the strong feelings |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
The river flows to the Sea which leads to the Oceans seperating two who love each other. She walks to the river, seeing the beauty around her but lonely for the person she longs to be with. However, then she sees that instead of it being a barrier, it leads her to him. Anyway, that's it in a nutshell. The Cliff Notes of my poem. Thanks for asking. aziza |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Oh Aziza! No explanation is needed here. This is lovely, and the tears are well-spent. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Aziza~ I have followed the river~ This is lovely~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you for reading and taking the time to share your thoughts. xoxoxo aziza |
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