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Thanks for the Memories

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Grinch
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0 posted 08-04-2006 07:57 PM       View Profile for Grinch   Email Grinch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Grinch


Thank you for the heartache
And the whimpering at night.
Thank you for the promise that
“Everything would be alright”
Did I thank you for the splinters
As my world crashed round my head?
Or for making me believe
In every twisted thing you said?
Should I cover you in glory,
Hang your portrait on my wall?
For taking me to heights
From which you knew that I’d soon fall.

Thank you for the crushing,
When the crush became too much,
The left behind, and out my mind
emotions - I'm so touched.
Never mind the tears and torture
From a wound that never mends
I think all that was covered when you said,
“We can still be friends”
I think I’m all done thanking now,
As I lie alone here in my bed
But I’d thank you one more time
If I could get you out my head.
© Copyright 2006 Grinch - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 08-04-2006 08:48 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Grinch,
Ouch! Sarcasm at a new level. Proof some pity parties are bigger than others. I must say as to form, you write very well, In my humble opinion. As to experience, I have felt the pain. Thanks for the reminder. I truly hope all is well soon. Time is your friend. Peace.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Grinch
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2 posted 08-04-2006 09:12 PM       View Profile for Grinch   Email Grinch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Grinch


Larry,

I’m not going to say “thanks” mainly because I know the word it replaced in the above effort but I do appreciate you taking the time to read it and the kind words regarding my attempt.

BTW

Don’t tell my wife I wrote this, I’d hate for her to get any ideas – after 20 something years I’ve grown accustomed to her.


sandgrain
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3 posted 08-04-2006 09:43 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

I love this write. It's first class satire in flowing lines.


    Rae
Kimberly ann
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4 posted 08-04-2006 10:17 PM       View Profile for Kimberly ann   Email Kimberly ann   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kimberly ann

i know how u feel...i just lost one of my friendships with a guy.
Midnitesun
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5 posted 08-05-2006 08:12 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Ah, an enjoyable love-pain write, dripping with  just the right touch of bitterness.
Magnus
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6 posted 08-05-2006 08:22 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Well done,  you should team up with Passing
Shadows,  she writes this style very very
well.  
aziza
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7 posted 08-05-2006 11:53 PM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

Your words hooked me.
This is my second read of your poem.
It's cynical and wonderful in the bite.
Good writing.

aziza
seraphin
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8 posted 08-05-2006 11:55 PM       View Profile for seraphin   Email seraphin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for seraphin

My friend aziza said it best. I echo her words.
TomMark
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9 posted 01-06-2008 06:52 PM       View Profile for TomMark   Email TomMark   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TomMark

Ha ha ah aha ha aha ha aha ha.
 
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