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aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2006-08-01 02:12 AM


Soul Angel

I lie in the cold
face to the limp sun
snow flakes dust my cheeks
with kisses
I slide my arms up and down
my legs open and close
pushing heaps of snow
away, away, away
from me
until I stand
and gaze at the snow angel
that took my place

my snow angel
my guardian angel
my soul angel

aziza

© Copyright 2006 Alison - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2006-08-01 02:19 AM


aziza

I've always wanted to make a snow angel....so unique is your "limp sun"...I like it!

passing shadows
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2 posted 2006-08-01 06:37 AM


I may have that chance to make one soon

it snows in Kansas City and that's where I'm thinkin' about goin'

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2006-08-01 07:13 AM


did a few gravel angels in the past
and asphalt ones too
darn harley's always like to test ya

enjoyed this ms

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2006-08-01 08:21 AM



Saved faster than you can say "Aziza Angel"!

~ Delightfully divine! I loved it! I envisioned and experienced every magical aspect of that moment.

Written as only an angel could do!

Giving you a warm, appreciative hug for this gem of a poem!

EA

the quell
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5 posted 2006-08-01 10:35 AM


As has already been said, the 'limp sun' is a beautiful image. I love how you extracted such beauty from the simple act of making a snow angel. The last bit was beautiful

They aren't flaps; they're my face!
                    - The Mighty Boosh

SusieQ
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6 posted 2006-08-01 04:26 PM



This is beautiful.

The Lady
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7 posted 2006-08-02 03:13 PM



Yes!

impressive lines here...

"until I stand
and gaze at the snow angel
that took my place"


seraphin
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8 posted 2006-08-02 03:18 PM


Uniquely aziza! Wonderful!
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
9 posted 2006-08-02 03:30 PM


A delightful read!
I love making snow angels!
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart..
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul.

aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
10 posted 2006-08-02 10:36 PM


Thank you all.
If you can't make snow angels -
maybe try making sand angels.

Your words mean a lot to me.

xoxoox
aziza

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