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brother stone
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since 2006-01-25
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0 posted 2006-07-31 11:02 AM



now i know how a derelict feels
looking up expectant
into eyes that won’t look back

you can tell by his expression
he feels as if he knows them
and he wants to know them but
they don’t want to know him back

a familiar face that strides by
turned aside not to seem aware
not to give any back
and maybe be asked for more

when i look at you now
your carefully composed face
your little draw back turn
i turn away too look away too

like i’m trying not to know
but i know how he feels


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brother stone
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since 2006-01-25
Posts 28

1 posted 2006-08-02 09:50 AM


brother stone is sad because nobody answered his poem and he thought it was a good one. so he will answer himself. it makes me not want to write anymore.
Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2006-08-02 02:33 PM


brother stone is right
it is a good poem
and the lack of replies somehow
fits the mood and content

but lack of replies, doesn't mean
no one has read, as Pips has many readers
who choose to remain anonymous, in the shadows

keep that quill in your hand, please
thanks for sharing

Larry C
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3 posted 2006-08-02 03:35 PM


And if you're homeless in Las Vegas, those who care are outlawed from helping! Go figure. Nicely done and a tough subject that makes many uncomfortable. But I've been there.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

XOx Uriah xOX
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since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403
Virginia
4 posted 2006-08-02 04:14 PM


I also know how a derelict feels.
But, thats mostly 'cuz I have often been a derelict.
regardless...
If this is an example of your talent...
Please PLEASE !  Do not stop !
I was impressed with the thoughts behind this and the expression of them.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
5 posted 2006-08-02 10:13 PM



i understand

aziza
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
6 posted 2006-08-02 10:29 PM


I, too, felt your poem.  

The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
7 posted 2006-08-02 10:51 PM



brother stone, I don't
know how I missed this poem

I understand and enjoyed
it

please keep writing

and Larry is right
if I pass an apple
to a homeless person
here in Las Vegas
I can be fined $1,000.00

what the hell
I do it anyway


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