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The Lady
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0 posted 07-27-2006 11:42 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for The Lady




tempter
shape shifter
he twirls her round
the dance floor
feverish blossom
in white dress

close now
his eyes grab bayou water
send its reflection to her
as shes never seen it before
sorghum thick

driving beat
his thighs pump la-la
her shoulders swing white
to the fiddle and frottoir

lights string the dance floor
encircling a study of heat
something takes leave of her

he slips juju
in her palm
ah bebe
he whispers

leaves her lying in the bramble bush
heart pounding to the beat
of the faded jingle
white dress faded
© Copyright 2006 Kate - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-27-2006 11:57 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

talk about some night moves
~sorghum thick~
grinning here
The Lady
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2 posted 07-28-2006 12:02 AM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



Thank you Kacy.
The charcoal man is
so scandalous.
He's taken on a life
of his own.

Smile.

JamesMichael
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3 posted 07-28-2006 01:30 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice writing...James
The Lady
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Thank you, James.

aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!


5 posted 07-28-2006 02:03 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

You brought me a different world.  Does that make sense?  You took me elsewhere and I saw a culture I am not usually part of and ... I saw ...

driving beat
his thighs pump la-la

and I fell in love with your poem.
The Lady
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Thank you aziza.
I'm glad you saw and
heard it. I love
Zydeco music and
I love the
charcoal man.


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A wonderful read dear Lady, aziza relied as I felt, in a different world, seductive, primative in nature seeking the pleasure of the moment. Great write and scene painting.

Sincerely
Rick
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lady one...zyd' is the verve..the bad pulse rowdy dow...can see the cypress hair'd boys grinnin here.  makes me hongry for mudbugs and sweecorn, red spuds on a cocola tray...and some dare ya eye'd gypsy foot in cotton skimpy
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whoa...ehhh hem....

incredible writing Lady

enjoyed
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More?

Please?

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WOW, this is one of your Best!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The Lady
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Thank you so much Rick.
Im glad you enjoyed it.

Oh Stranger, you are a scandal.
You like mudbugs?

Oops! Hee hee LeeJ.
Caught me. Thank you.

Cant seem to get him out
of my mind, Karilea.
Thank you.

WindWalker, thank you so much.
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Very sensual and just as good as ever!

- Owl
The Lady
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Thank you dear friend.
Hugs.

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"driving beat
his thighs pump la-la"

still caught me, held me and made me watch listen and learn.  Loving this.

A
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