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Bruised Eyes
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Bruised Eyes |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
bruised eyes look out at skeletal branches scarring the sky as they beckon with promises of untold freedom instead she is held captive by strident words which beat relentlessly until her spirit freezes, cracking under the brutality of an iron will cascades of emotional blows raining down, drowning trust, destroying innocence, demanding payment for goods never received, only promised by glossy images advertising a truth imprisoned in nocturnal dreams icicles of fear fall about a body bent to false submission directed by a mind that refuses to believe or relent while a white flag is a decoy when she stands knife in hand, inviting him to dance. aziza [This message has been edited by aziza (07-26-2006 11:42 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I don't believe anyone could have described this better, although very dark, I must admit, the feelings of this are very dark as well... interestingly good poem |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Sometime it is easier read and understood through bruised eyes ..... seen many a pair that bled same as these words. a provoking write indeed! - well felt Ct |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
This is powerful, done to perfection. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
This is fantastic. It really hits me between the eyes (no pun intended). My eyes are always severely messed up so I know what you mean to the very last word. Cheers - Ed I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thank you. Each comment means a lot to me. aziza |
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elisalie16 Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118new jersey |
this poem was particularly striking. i could picture looking out a window either late at night or on a cold gray day. aziza, you have a very nice way with words --anne |
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