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Open Poetry #38

tonight was on the upside

elisalie16
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since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

0 posted 2006-07-23 11:48 PM

the sky had come to meet the ground
and cover everything in a thick gray mist
that hovered above our spinning heads
and blurred our eyes, that were already too wet
to define any of the edges we should have seen.

we stood so still while rocking without notice
as boys danced on the pavement
arms locked around their baby's waists,
watching their skirts cascade through the windless night.

lights buzzed orange and lost their shine
and we circled paths with heads thrown back
to gasp at and taunt the images that mirrored ourselves.

this weather is miserable
but these figures are a delight
to watch and make believe we're apart of
or dare to whisper that we enjoy.

let's dance off to somewhere we can recollect
or forget we ever knew this scene.
hold my hand, and i'll lead the way
or scoop me up, and take me with you.

[This message has been edited by elisalie16 (07-24-2006 01:11 AM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

1 posted 2006-07-23 11:52 PM

what a cool write
to recollect, or forget
your choice

elisalie16
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since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

2 posted 2006-07-24 12:00 PM

hahaa yes yes, a tough choice sometimes, also.
thank you.
--anne

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2006-07-24 12:09 PM

Excellent, elisalie!

"as boys danced on the pavement
arms locked around their baby's waists,
watching their skirts cascade through the windless night."

And the ending is great!

elisalie16
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since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

4 posted 2006-07-24 12:13 PM

thank you very very much

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

5 posted 2006-07-24 07:18 AM

I love it!

elisalie16
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since 2006-07-12

Posts 118
new jersey

6 posted 2006-07-24 10:40 AM

thanks passing shadows!

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