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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA

0 posted 2006-07-23 09:22 PM


Emptiness
within the rise and fall
of our insecurities
Longing
within the pulse of your being
I fell asleep
in your dreams
coddled
protected
in your thoughts
I feel more
Than I'm allowed
I want more
Than I'm willing to admit
I've convinced myself
That You are not my destiny
I fall victim
To the rise and fall
Of your pulse
I'm drowning within our broken connection
within our dreams
within the static frequency
That burns my heart
Stuck
Between the
Emptiness
longing
and the rise and fall
of loving you
I can't seem to reach you
So far away
To tell you
That
You're my Saturday

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

© Copyright 2006 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
1slick_lady
Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace
1 posted 2006-07-23 09:30 PM


feel this in my bones

and the title got me first
very nice write

[This message has been edited by 1slick_lady (07-24-2006 01:14 AM).]

Edward Grim
Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina
2 posted 2006-07-23 11:14 PM


"You're my Saturday" That's great

I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person.

elisalie16
Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 118
new jersey
3 posted 2006-07-23 11:25 PM


i also liked the title to this. it was what made me read it, and i am very glad i did. i liked it. very nice.
aziza
Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
4 posted 2006-07-24 02:14 AM


The title drew me in - your writing kept me here.

aziza

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
5 posted 2006-07-24 07:09 AM


awesome write!

love the new pic too

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