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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2006-07-17 07:39 AM



you make me miss boston
and atlanta
and other places

where your rain is thick
in navy blue

when you play grown up
make me
and carry cry sounds

in your shirt pocket
with the buttons undone

when you say of my hands
that they are mean men
punishing you with soft

in helpless ways undressing
the doors you had locked

and you can't sleep now
that the sound of metal
unzips the morning

at your trembling windows
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Sunshine
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1 posted 2006-07-17 09:03 AM



In fine form
at the top
of the morn...


Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2006-07-17 09:42 AM


Dark~
Monday morning *sighs*
caught in realize ...
they are my own~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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with you
3 posted 2006-07-17 02:37 PM


*whew*

love it when you do what you do mister


Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2006-07-17 02:50 PM


ms sun, thanks for the eye smile ms.

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ms marge, an early friday perhaps? thanks lady

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seasue, I enjoy the whew of you always, thanks

The Lady
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5 posted 2006-07-17 11:48 PM



Just trying to breathe here.


aziza
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6 posted 2006-07-18 12:23 PM


I could hear this poem.  It reaches inside me.

aziza

zaz
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7 posted 2006-07-18 12:27 PM


excellent work.
MGROVES
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8 posted 2006-07-18 01:53 AM


love the way you see and feel

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Potatobunny
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9 posted 2006-07-18 07:48 AM


This poem seems like it has so much more meaning than you would expect from a poem with that many lines. Keep writing!
Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2006-07-18 08:49 AM


lady ms, cpr? my hands are very cool..thanks for the eyes ms

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aziza, thanks for slipping in
and letting my words know you

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zaz, humble thanks to you


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ms groves, always a pleasure to feel you
watching


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pb, thanks for the read and comments

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