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divine chaos
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 617
dancing 'neath the moon

0 posted 2006-07-16 11:29 PM



I walk in silence
Seeking after
Something that
I need to find
Not knowing,
As I stumble faster
Down the path
To sure disaster,
What it is.

I'm searching blind.

Chasing faded dreams
Through darkened woods
Hoping for the
faintest glimmer
Looking for the
slightest shimmer
Of a promise
to be delivered
As hope is growing
ever dimmer
Of the madness
ever ending

Am I breaking
While I'm bending
To another's will?
Its neverending!
And all the while
I should be tending
To my own
most inner needs

Do I fight
Or will I falter?
Do I stand firm
Or should I barter
For my life
Such as it is

My steps are quickly
Growing slower
Through this dense wood
My fear creates

I try to find
The source of sobbing
Screams that echo
Off the mountains
Hopeless whimpers
Of frustration
I search for answers
To hidden questions
As the cries crescendo
thundering, pounding
Screaming in my brain

Just as I'm sure
There is no ending
To this hell
My mind's creating
A heart wrenching shriek
Rips from my throat
Jolting me awake

And as I sit
Confused and lonely
The dream fades quickly
As it came
Soft sobs still echo
All around me
I understand
from where they came
and raise my hands
to dampened cheeks
To catch the tears
That stream my face

Sheli
2001

[This message has been edited by divine chaos (07-17-2006 10:39 AM).]

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Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
1 posted 2006-07-16 11:55 PM


Wow....very articulate.  If only I could speak so clearly of the inner workings of me.  Nice to read you.  I'm hanging out in the gentleness of the blue this peaceful evening.  

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink


TinaTrivett
Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569

2 posted 2006-07-17 12:59 PM


Wow is right...very nice read Sheli. I love it.
themute
Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 469
Maryland
3 posted 2006-07-17 01:43 AM


Am I'm breaking
While I'm bending

is the am intended? i suggest i am, doesnt go with the pattern but it sounds a little rhythmic, or you could just say i'm breaking, whatever...  

conjurs memories of my own crying dreams, god i miss them. thank you

I am the two-toed wanderer

divine chaos
Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617
dancing 'neath the moon
4 posted 2006-07-17 10:38 AM


thankies for the kind comments

themute, actually that "Am I'm" was a typo lol, thanks for catching it! I changed it  

deasomnians
Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 87
California
5 posted 2006-07-17 02:15 PM


Am I breaking
While I'm bending
To another's will?

Glad you changed it, because otherwise it wouldn't have reminded me of the question I ask myself all the time.

Excellent write. "Wow" was my first reaction, too.

"Nature has implanted in our minds an insatiable longing to seek the truth" - CJCL Convention Theme 2005

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