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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon 
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I can hear your desperation over a thousand miles The incessant whining about the insignificant Cries for attention, grating on my nerves. You ask me why I'm distant. "Your imagination," I reply. You ask if you're losing me. I can't yet say the words, "baby, I'm already gone." You can't go forward, can't go back. you're reaching out for me now, only shadows in your grasp Too little, much too late I know you feel the distance The chill between us You keep asking questions, ignoring the answers there between the lines. all thats left of me here is a fading apparition In time the mists that cloud your vision will lift from before your eyes. will you be surprised when you realize Baby, I'm already gone. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
... but I am glad you are here. I like this a lot - think I remember you showing it to me long ago. I loved it then and do now. It stood the test of time. Love, aziza |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow...it's like we live the same life in parts |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
thankies zi, you're such a great #1 fan *shnuggles*  love you, sweets. shadows, ya know, i've thought the same thing SO many times when reading your writings *hugs* ~*Sheli*~ By words the mind is winged |
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BeautifullyBroken84 Junior Member
since 2005-11-16
Posts 11Minnesota, USA |
"grating on my nerves" <--- loved this line. Powerful verb...hits to the core! ~* I write the waves of my emotions, with my pen as my ship and my heart as my compass *~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I can't yet say the words, "baby, I'm already gone." Oh Sheli... that's between a rock and a hard spot. If this is an old poem I would imagine you're unstuck by now. Makes for a wonderful poem. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...they can be present physically but long gone every other way...James |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
Broken - thank you for reading  I struggled with that line, it was the best I could think of to describe the feeling *smiles* Lady - yep, I'm unstuck now, but I sure was stuck then. Couldn't figure out how to tell him he no longer had a home here -- this poem was my way of doing it. James - 'tis sad, but true. Sadder when the other person doesn't realize it's just a shell that remains. Thanks for reading ~*Sheli*~ By words the mind is winged |
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