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RevengeIsMine
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since 07-08-2006
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Australia


0 posted 07-15-2006 09:06 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine


This will be my 3rd poem and probly the worst one yet.
The other day in class we were asked to write a poem about how we felt and ofcourse boring old me came up with this....

You told me i was special,
but i knew very well that what you had just said wasn't ment for me at all.

So maybe i'm not pretty, petite or underfed
and so what if i am not the local tart that you want in your bed,
I don't give out quickes,
nor do i do one night stands,
I'm just music's number one fan.

But i am someone special,
I dont care how i look,
I will frount the word united,
Hold my head up high,
For i am proud to be a Bloody Australian with a sparkle in my eye.


P.S; I do not expect you to like it, but ur critisisum is welcome.
© Copyright 2006 A Typical Aussie Chick - All Rights Reserved
TinaTrivett
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1 posted 07-15-2006 09:13 PM       View Profile for TinaTrivett   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TinaTrivett

I like it! Especially this part:

"So maybe i'm not pretty, petite or underfed
and so what if i am not the local tart that you want in your bed"

I think you put your words together nicely in this piece.
RevengeIsMine
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2 posted 07-15-2006 09:16 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Thanks Tina.
passing shadows
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3 posted 07-16-2006 08:33 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I like it
divine chaos
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dancing 'neath the moon


4 posted 07-16-2006 12:39 PM       View Profile for divine chaos   Email divine chaos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for divine chaos

So maybe i'm not pretty, petite or underfed
and so what if i am not the local tart that you want in your bed,
I don't give out quickes,
nor do i do one night stands,
I'm just music's number one fan.
*************************

love these lines

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

RevengeIsMine
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5 posted 07-18-2006 02:55 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Thanx Every1 for ur lovley comments, they are very much appriciated.
GothicCherry
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6 posted 12-17-2008 08:50 AM       View Profile for GothicCherry   Email GothicCherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GothicCherry

I found a bit of humor in this piece. Lol. I liked it.
 
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