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RyaNs TaLL
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0 posted 2006-07-06 12:18 PM


First of all let me start by saying that this poem is not a personal attack on religion, faith or the personal beliefes of others. Rather it is an expression of contempt for judgment without trying to see someone elses point of view. Thank you

~Ryan Stall

An Angels Acumen (casuist)

The cretinous Angel's apriorism slowly bleeds
Losing life and worth
How could this be ?
Infallable as you are
And yet you look down upon us
For the way we use our will
But what will have you posessed ?
And what choices have you faultered ?
have you carried the worlds weight ?
No, you sit above on your cloud
Passing judgement
But what will have you possesed ?
And what choices were not yours ?
See there is something you dont understand,
Angel of god
Our will is not free will at all
But is bought for more than you know
Casuist without our experience
Obvious your perspicacity is not our own
Come live through us
Before your acumen is set upon us

Any affirmations or criticism welcome



© Copyright 2006 RyaNs TaLL - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2006-07-06 12:21 PM


Welcome to Passions Ryan

good stuff for pondering
hope to read more of you

RyaNs TaLL
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2 posted 2006-07-06 12:25 PM


thnks but i left the last verse out on accident do you know how to edit ?

RyaNs TaLL
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3 posted 2006-07-06 12:29 PM


Nevermind i fixed it but thank you i apprciate it

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Gaia
4 posted 2006-07-06 10:39 AM


lol
just ask him to
eschew obfuscation


and welcome to these blue poetry pages

passing shadows
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5 posted 2006-07-06 10:50 AM


sorry Ryan, I didn't come back to this till just now...glad you figured it out
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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
6 posted 2006-07-06 11:48 AM


Welcome to the blue pages....this is a wonderful start....

please check your email for a pip greeting


Greeneyes~

And so it those we live with
and should know who elude us
But we can still love them
we can love completely
without complete understanding

Paradise1
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since 2006-06-23
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7 posted 2006-07-06 03:43 PM


I LOVE IT WELCOME TO THE BLUE PAGES!!!!!!!!
The Lady
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8 posted 2006-07-09 04:19 PM




Nice work Ryan.

Welcome!

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