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OwlSA
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0 posted 2006-06-30 02:55 PM



SATURDAY NIGHT
December 1998

I turned off the squawking television
and the glaring electric light
and heard soul-soft summer rain
courting the whisper of the wind,
and saw my night-black trees
in their lacy underwear
dancing erotically
in anticipation.
Soft, soft distant tyres swished
their rainwet encouragement
and, intermittently, a dog applauded from afar.
This is why I have to be alone.

- Owl

© Copyright 2006 Diana van den Berg - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2006-06-30 03:36 PM


Wow! Fantastic piece of writing, dear Diana.
You made me smile, because of the last sentence ... you mean someone might profit from your creative interpretation of rain ... or it could also mean that if you were not alone you would not have perceived these sounds and visions.

Love,
Margherita

Enchantress
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2 posted 2006-06-30 03:37 PM


Diana your imagery is impeccable.
This piece left lovely visions dancing in my mind.
Hugs~Nancy

Don't bring me down now,
let me stay here for awhile
You know life's too short,
let me bathe here in your smile.

passing shadows
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3 posted 2006-06-30 05:02 PM


I am alone for two weeks at a time since my roommate is an offshore boat captain...I do so enjoy those two weeks when he's gone...and then I have no peace or privacy during the two weeks he's home...

I understand this poem so well...SO well

OwlSA
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4 posted 2006-06-30 05:38 PM


Thank you Margherita.  Giggles, no, I don't mind somebody profiting from my perceptions!  Neither did I mean that I wouldn't have perceived those things if I hadn't been alone.  What I meant was that I wouldn't have had the freedom to understand, enjoy and appreciate them.

Thanks, Nancy.  I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.

Dixie, yes, I can WELL imagine how well you understand this.  Solitude can be so very beautiful and peaceful.  I know many people who can't be alone for long.  I am one who needs to be alone (except for animals) most of the time.

- Owl

The Lady
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5 posted 2006-06-30 11:36 PM




I understand why you need to be alone Diana... for soul-soft summer rain. I need to be alone for desert mockingbirds that sing in the still of night... except of course for my animals.
Perfectly done.

shirtless
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since 2006-04-29
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6 posted 2006-06-30 11:52 PM


I like this. On first reading the poem does not necessarily suggest the last line, but after reading the last line the poem can suggest nothing else. Thanks for posting it.

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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
7 posted 2006-07-02 11:47 AM


Thanks, Kate, for understanding (as you always do!).  I can understand too how you need to be alone to appreciate the desert mockingbirds.  

Thanks, shirtless, for understanding and appreciating the essence of the poem.

- Owl

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