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Danielle
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since 1999-12-01

Posts 80
Providence, RI, USA

0 posted 2006-06-28 11:36 PM

So far away...

The distance between us is growing

I don't know how to be, or how to deal

I feel so empty inside...

So alone, like I'm on my own

How long will it be till you return?

I'm not sure how much longer I can hold on...

My grip is slipping

And I feel like I'm going to fall

© Copyright 2006 Danielle Lefebvre - All Rights Reserved

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

1 posted 2006-06-29 12:37 PM

it happens like that sometimes, and sad it does

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

2 posted 2006-06-29 09:26 AM

Let yourself fall INSIDE and there you will discover that you are not alone.

The longing is felt!

Love,
Margherita

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2006-06-29 01:59 PM

Hi Danielle..
Good to read you once again.
Sending heart hugs your way, Nancy.

Don't bring me down now,
let me stay here for awhile
You know life's too short,
let me bathe here in your smile.

ManOfWolves28
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since 2005-12-21

Posts 83

4 posted 2006-06-29 02:07 PM

This looks like it could apply to a pet or a family member or friend. I like it alot.

Call me Crowbar the big rig drivin mad man.....

shirtless
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since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

5 posted 2006-06-29 02:09 PM

This seems so honest, direct, and heartfelt. A very emotional write.

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JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2006-07-01 09:09 PM

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

jody5
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since 2005-12-21

Posts 876
California, U.S.A.

7 posted 2006-07-02 12:02 PM

If you fall someone will pick you up. Have faith in yourself and the people who love you and If that fails you trust in God.

Huggs Kimberly

Midnitesun

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Gaia

8 posted 2006-07-02 12:15 PM

you've done a fine job
of letting the reader FEEL
the heartache,
and that's when poetry
really works best

rosepetals25

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PA

9 posted 2006-07-02 04:17 PM

I know this feeling some days.
Good write.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2006-07-03 08:10 PM

Nice writing...James

Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

11 posted 2006-07-04 12:50 PM

You touch the universal . . .
what good poetry does.

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