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nedj
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0 posted 2006-06-25 02:01 PM


~ Morning Mist ~

Into the dawn two hearts are beating
slowly, softly
almost touching.
Around each heart a body's breathing
and in it's grasp another's sleeping.

Arms and legs and other things
from each into the pot are thrown
and in the pot they're mixed
until they form one body
mind and soul.

And then light comes
so eyes can see and
skin can feel
and noses smell
the early morning lover's scent
the last residual of the night.

Stirring human shapes emerge
as from united sleep they rise.
The solar surgeon's knife has come
to separate
the Siamese twins.


© Copyright 2006 Ned Johnson - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2006-06-25 02:46 PM


quote:
until they form one body
mind and soul


Dear Ned, this is very beautiful and touches me especially because I have just written the last line of a poem that speaks of this oneness too. But it is much more surreal than yours probably! I fear I am addicted to the intangible, the ethereal, the abstract.... not always though! It depends ... Thank you anyway for your comment on my "Parting", which I highly appreciated.

I love your concreteness. This is a very intense write.

Love,
Margherita

nedj
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2 posted 2006-06-25 03:22 PM


I have to laugh, because this poem was written years before I ever even thought specifically about concreteness. Only later was it called to my attention and by then, like you, I had become more than a little addicted to abstractions. To be honest, I had never realized just how concrete this--and now that I think of it others of that era--actually were. But I confess it was totally unconscious at the time. :-)

I think that the reason so many poets are given to etherial words is because they were so popular in the literature that came before. We came to think that if you don't write like that, it can't be very good. But we don't live in the 19th century, and science isn't the only realm of human endeavor that has progressed since then.

Thanks, as always, for your kind words and thoughts. You have a lovely heart in which I love to bathe.

Love,
Ned

A poem's just a poet in a word.

Martie
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3 posted 2006-06-25 04:48 PM


Ned

I like the sensual feel to this...it is like swirling of the mist....an artist molding something from nothing.  

nedj
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4 posted 2006-06-25 07:47 PM


Martie: I've got to post another one that fits your description even better. :-) In fact, if I didn't know better, I'd think you were talking about it instead. It's now posted as "Summit."

A poem's just a poet in a word.

[This message has been edited by nedj (06-26-2006 04:56 PM).]

latearrival
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5 posted 2006-07-08 02:06 AM


Just bounced this up a bit as I think it deserves more readers. martyjo
nedj
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6 posted 2006-07-08 03:11 PM


It was one of my first, before I started collecting fans. :-) Thanks.

A poem's just a poet in a word.

Cari07
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since 2006-06-28
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7 posted 2006-07-09 12:34 PM


Very very beautiful.  Not what I first thought you were talking about though.  I loved it.  
divine chaos
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8 posted 2006-07-09 12:42 PM


This is a wonderful work. Very much enjoyed the read.

Sheli

The artist is nothing without the gift,
but the gift is nothing without work."
- Emile Zola (1840-1902)

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