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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2006-06-24 11:09 PM



As If….


waiting for the worthiness
as if you understand choices
made by you for me
I don’t remember circling
and where was the list
of my choices
I know me
mostly inappropriate
for others
and when you are all done
just let me know
when it is
my turn

just some words cut from
the diary of my heart



© Copyright 2006 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
jody5
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1 posted 2006-06-24 11:27 PM


This struck me as sad,  It reminded me of a time in my life that made me make some changes.  I hope you are okay and my perception of the poem is wrong.  very good write.


Huggs Kimberly


passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2006-06-25 06:37 AM


I can relate so well here Helen

you are assertive and strong though...I'm sure you'll get the message across but if they don't get it, that's their loss

Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2006-06-25 09:34 AM


Sigh! ... But do we need to wait?

Powerful lines!

Love,
Margherita

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2006-06-25 11:00 AM


"waiting for the worthiness"


Helen it comes fromn within and even though there are times I feel a lack of it...it really is there always...

You can't let others take that away from you~~

M

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
5 posted 2006-06-25 04:49 PM


Don't wait! Take your turn, now.
Martie
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6 posted 2006-06-25 04:59 PM


Helen...Gotta agree with Maureen up there!!  
Serena
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7 posted 2006-06-25 05:23 PM


though sad, it also struck me as strong willed as well. Even if some might openly come after you, you have the strength to return the favor.
Poetic Concept
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8 posted 2006-06-25 05:27 PM


Sounds like u feel bottled up in an abusive relationship...to the point where u r afraid to speak. I think that mental venting is needed in time like that...many people could learn alot from this I would like to see the sequel and independent womans thoughts. Anyways exceptional write...elevation is the key

Return the favor on: Swear to God

"How vain it is to sit down and write when u have not stood up to live"
                     Anonymous (Unknown)

Midnitesun
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Gaia
9 posted 2006-06-25 05:29 PM


glad you don't sit and wait
for anyone else
to decide worthiness
for you

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