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serenity blaze
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0 posted 06-23-2006 10:28 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Should you be without a doubt
then help yourself to mine...

I have
legion of despairs
unruly
restless in the line
waiting to be heard

as if

the miseries
would march like dimes

an army

of futility

like spaces inbetween the lines

doubled

twice for emphasis

impatient

glancing at the time:

"please press 1 to dial 2"

and take a number and thank you
for your patience while you wait
soon, someone will be with you

as if I needed company

and none of this would be complete

without the ringtones driving me

cellular insanity

pounding louder than my dawgs

as feet complain of gravity

and 122 is called

and it's too hot for pleasantries:

and I am number 226--

and though I've had enough of this

I wonder who is 666?

I blush as people curious

turn to see who laughed out loud

in organized absurdity

waiting for my turn to sigh

my story

to a clerk and wince

when they mark me as "processed"

they holler much too loudly:

Next!

as if the guy who stood behind
me didn't know his number
or
the fact that he stood in line
of borderline brutality

designed to waste our time

as I

felt a sense of pride when I
was directed down the hall
smirking at 338
to stand behind "225"

" I have lost my mind,"
I said--
unaware, that once again,
I uttered it out loud...

© Copyright 2006 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
JL
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1 posted 06-23-2006 10:51 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

OK
I had to chuckle out loud.
Sorry, I know this is a real pain,
but I could see it happening in my mind, and it brought back some realism for me.

Excellent!!

JL
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2 posted 06-23-2006 10:58 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

But was it your outdoor voice
or the "I think I heard that" voice?

Once again, your ability
to bring the world
to the forefront
and in poetic form, yet!
remains, to me,
an astounding force
of natural...

you don't push...
and you don't allow yourself
to be pushed...

but it comes through,
loud and clear...
and then...
mirrored.

God bless you, gal.

I would like to think
I had that fortitude...
but sometimes you make me
wonder...

and it is at those moments
when I'm proudest
of you.



serenity blaze
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3 posted 06-23-2006 11:02 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze



to y'both
iliana
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4 posted 06-24-2006 12:35 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Ok, Ser, I wanna hear all about it...tho' I think I got the major points here...lol.  *hugs*....jojo
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5 posted 06-24-2006 02:11 AM       View Profile for OwlSA   Email OwlSA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OwlSA

Giggles and sympathy and empathy.  Superbly Serenity-put!

- Owl
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6 posted 06-24-2006 08:44 AM       View Profile for Patricia   Email Patricia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Patricia

Smiling at you...this is wonderful!  

Patricia
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7 posted 06-24-2006 12:27 PM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for icebox

"I wonder who is 666?"

"Let me please introduce myself
Im a man of wealth and taste"

*smile*


I knew a woman a very long time ago who referred to sex as "the procedure."  Process or procedure, if it doesn't include dinner and dancing, I guess it all feels the same.

I hope today is a better day for you.

Yours truly,
Son of the Morning Light

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8 posted 06-24-2006 04:39 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

"I blush as people curious

turn to see who laughed out loud

in organized absurdity

waiting for my turn to sigh

my story"

grinning here
understanding this too well
Margherita
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9 posted 06-24-2006 05:25 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

quote:
I blush as people curious

turn to see who laughed out loud

in organized absurdity



We have come a long way ... but we still have to pay a price for every conquest and we still are "numbers".

Enjoyed this greatly and I can relate, as far as the queue is concerned... and don't we all lose our mind in certain moments!

Wonderful job!

Love,
Margherita
ThisDiamond
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10 posted 06-24-2006 06:17 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

The spirit of this write is staggering...just brewing with your signature humor and compassion...and I love that you treat yourself so kindly...
Hugs Gal...not easy bein' cheesy!

TD
nedj
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11 posted 06-24-2006 06:30 PM       View Profile for nedj   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit nedj's Home Page   View IP for nedj

I laughed out loud at your opening line, and not just because it was was clever. It reminded me of a gymnist who smack-dab nails their landing after a particularly good routine. Except that you did it at both ends. :-) Kudos! I hope I remember this the next time I go to DMV.

A poem's just a poet in a word.

Ceinwyn
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12 posted 06-24-2006 08:32 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

I see myself standing in line at the Social Security...have I read this before? deja vu...

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

nedj
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13 posted 06-24-2006 09:19 PM       View Profile for nedj   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit nedj's Home Page   View IP for nedj

Ceinwyn, I like George Carlin's twist on it: vuja de: having the uncanny feeling that none of this has ever happened before. LOL
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14 posted 06-24-2006 09:49 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

You my girl are fabulous! To be able to put pathos and humor into a situation such as this when it is despair and annoyance you had a right to feel. To be able to write it all down so we can feel it along with you. To be able to cover the weariness and disgust you most certainly understandably have the right to feel and cause us to smile and still feel your pain is a true art. I bow to you and salute you,   martyjo  

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15 posted 06-24-2006 10:03 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

This is great..reminds me slightly of my
35 minute wait to talk to "customer service"
My neck still hurts from holding the cell
phone next to my ear.
jody5
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16 posted 06-24-2006 11:50 PM       View Profile for jody5   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jody5

I have days that I have felt the same way but you tread on and try to be posative.  I walk the dog and get out of the house.  Nice write.

Huggs Kimberly

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17 posted 06-24-2006 11:56 PM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

in my book baby
you are at
the front of the line
Klassy Lassy
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18 posted 06-25-2006 12:13 AM       View Profile for Klassy Lassy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Klassy Lassy

Serenity, how is it that people get totally lost in 'the system', but they never, never lose those bloomin' ID numbers? I think there is something to be said for losing one's mind on occasion, as long as it is well timed!    

~ Klassy
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I nod my head and chuckle, number 226. Great write, once again.

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20 posted 06-25-2006 05:39 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

lol
had to come back to this
remembering a time when
a friend was the number 13
and they called 12, then 14
and she stomped her feet
as they ignored
her existence
and said
but we never offered
a number 13!

that poor man who was number 14
was bewildered
apologetic
kind enough
or scared enough
to step three steps back
and give her what she wanted


*this isn't me actually, but what happened to a 'friend'
who never took NO for an answer
to anything
except the reaper's demands
in that final lineup
serenity blaze
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21 posted 06-25-2006 07:19 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I'd love to be able to tell ya'll a funny story about the conception of this one--but actually, I just made it all up.

I was thinking on the psychology of lines, beaurocracy, and how isolated from one another we all seem to become in a circumstance that otherwise would be chaotic. I wasn't trying to fool ya'll--I was just writin'! All of this spawned by the first two lines, as I pictured how many doubts and fears I had--I just sort of imagined the place that would have to exist to serve them all.

And Kacy? It's true that sometimes number 13 is removed from the shuffle--and I have never actually felt the pain of discovery of whether or not they do the same with "666"--butI HAVE thought about it. grins

Now there was a time, at the long defunct concert hall called "The Warehouse", wherein they had installed a maze for us misbehaving rock fans to walk through to get to the door after they recognized the dangers of the "stampede" that rock shows were once reknowned for.

I recall the first time we encountered that--and how docile the once boisterous crowd became when being forced to walk through that thing. Then somebody started to "moo". Another joined in, and before we knew it, we were all shuffling and mooing our way into the place. Some started putting thier fingers on their heads for horns.

Hmm.

Perhaps that is where the now infamous "devil" handsign that is a common signature at rock shows all began...

I think too much, huh?

Thanks all for reading.

and um, "Moo".
serenity blaze
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22 posted 06-25-2006 07:20 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

and DING DING DING--I just scrolled up to see that nedj was number THIRTEEN in the reply scroll!

You win a kiss!

gleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
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23 posted 06-26-2006 01:26 AM       View Profile for Klassy Lassy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Klassy Lassy

Serenity, you are just terrific!  I have always wanted to write good fiction, poetic or otherwise.  You have innate talent for composing poetry and writing.  I so enjoyed the poem and the explanation!  

~ Klassy
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24 posted 06-26-2006 02:13 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Not only could I envision this scene, but I actually was in part of it yesterday at Ikea of all places!  Do you have Ikea there?  I was waiting for a table, and they skipped my number then tried to tell MOI I had to wait!  I didn't

Missed ya even for 3 days
 
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