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transparent_beauty
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since 2006-06-21
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0 posted 2006-06-23 12:15 PM


"The Unbecoming Silence"

completely aware
that i speak in silence
my voice unheard
like that of a child
who, in me,
lives meek and bleary
and to this day
i cannot pretend
that i do not deplore
my indisposition
it is my hostility
that could make the kindest of souls
tangle guardedly into my web of fears
it is my lack of application
that trips me unmercifully
into the position of failing
and i cannot attempt to contend again
that would only guarantee my final checkmate
it is under my accountability
to have never spoken a word
or perhaps have said an endless amount
or spinelessly have bitten my tongue
my dreams i've ruined to the point of exhaustion
and the bitter melody
of my unsaid words
remain secluded always.

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Beneath the northern stars
1 posted 2006-06-23 12:25 PM


I've been through this. One of those things that seems like it'll kill you while it's going on.....except it doesn't. Well done.

sky

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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2 posted 2006-06-23 04:31 PM


quote:
i cannot pretend
that i do not deplore
my indisposition
it is my hostility
that could make the kindest of souls
tangle guardedly into my web of fears



... but you do communicate well!

Very good write.

Love,
Margherita

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2006-06-23 04:36 PM


this is one I'm sure most of us can identify with

well done

JL
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since 2004-04-01
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Texas, USA
4 posted 2006-06-23 04:38 PM


"my voice unheard
like that of a child
who, in me,
lives meek and bleary
and to this day
i cannot pretend
that i do not deplore
my indisposition
it is my hostility"


Tragic and very sad.  Beautifully written, but sad.
God Bless!

JL

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