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Martie
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0 posted 2006-06-21 01:38 PM



Music from the First of Summer

The grasses move like feathers
in the breezes through the canyon
and the fog in soft of cover
brings the ocean’s fragrant sand in

And the sleepy peace of dawning
with only sheets for cover
softly feather heads on pillows
touch an eyelash still a dreaming

And the buds of petals sing now
with a buzz of frantic movement
giving purpose to the beauty
that has filled the air with fragrance

And I want to dance on green grass
in a dress of yellow daisies
lay me down within the arbor
listening as the fruit is ripened

But I feel the clock is ticking
in the shadows past the hedges
caught within the dirt and drainage
of the folding fallen wildflowers

So I hold on to the questions
and I wait for the horizon
to reply with mauve of sunset
warm with dark and heavy breathing

And I know the perfect feeling
is in holding on one minute
to a look that’s filled with loving
falling into drape of silken

For the hum in dark of midnight
under canopy of stardom
singing soft the mad of midday
with a sigh within a love song

is the music from the first of coming home
------
with thanks for the rhythm to Suzanne, Leonard Cohen....a RP just because

© Copyright 2006 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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1 posted 2006-06-21 01:46 PM



magnificant!!!

So I hold on to the questions
and I wait for the horizon
to reply with mauve of sunset
warm with dark and heavy breathing

your visuals are perfectly woven to create an escape for the reader...

thank you Martie, once again!!!!

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2 posted 2006-06-21 01:49 PM


Martie..
Two of my favourite stanzas--

"And I want to dance on green grass
in a dress of yellow daisies
lay me down within the arbor
listening as the fruit is ripened"

....and...

"And I know the perfect feeling
is in holding on one minute
to a look that’s filled with loving
falling into drape of silken"


Beautifully written sweet friend..
Then at the end..I saw your footnote
went back to the beginning and sang it through
to the tune of Suzanne..
and it fit perfectly!

YOU are an amazing writer..
and when I grow up I want to be able to write like you.

~Special Lavender Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Sunshine
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3 posted 2006-06-21 02:05 PM



A perfect poem for the longest day...



Thank you, Sissie...

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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4 posted 2006-06-21 03:08 PM


Martie,

I loved your melody of summer's first day.

Absolutely Beautiful!

-Bob

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5 posted 2006-06-21 03:38 PM


Written only as our Martie can - perfectly!
Thankyou for this dear lady.
hugs,Chris

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6 posted 2006-06-21 04:43 PM


beautiful Martie
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7 posted 2006-06-21 11:35 PM


And to you, thanks...for the memory you've shared today. May you share a lifetime ot them!

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8 posted 2006-06-22 03:50 AM


Oh, joy!  This is beautiful, Martie!   ....jo
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9 posted 2006-06-22 09:22 AM


Martie, floral essences flow from your illustrious pen. Lovely writing! Lovely you!

Sending you a warm, hug-o-love,

Linda
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10 posted 2006-06-22 01:11 PM


Reading your poetry is like walking through a forest for me.  There is so much rich beauty and brilliance that I want to stop and wring out every last drop from every tiny spot, afraid to miss the weeniest bit.  This was Martie-great!  Thank you so much for sharing your gift.

- Owl

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11 posted 2006-06-29 07:54 AM


WOW - this is fantastic - what a writer you are!!! Paul
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