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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
My time is valuable like my love. Don't waste it or abuse it There are people I have to meet There are places I must travel while in this illusion called life Don't count yourself with such importance If you loose me you never had me We just completed what we were meant to finish. I must tread on with or without you You'll remain in my heart freely I will never lock you out |
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Walter_Mitty_Esq Junior Member
since 2006-06-01
Posts 21 |
"If you loose me you never had me/ We just completed what we were meant to finish." Simple, yet elegant. You've given words to a realization I've had ever since I broke up with someone I loved - or at least, I thought I loved. Thank you! |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Thank you Walter. I have been going through my old journals and posting what I have learned about myself in life. Huggs Kimberly |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
very wise way to look at life... enjoyed this |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
"this illusion called life" ::smiles:: yes. But let it be realized... If life is an illusion then so is the "liver". The one that calls it..."illusion" is himself an illusion. ::smiles:: "Don't count yourself with such importance" :: bows :: Wonderful write ! |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
LeeJ I am glad you enjoyed this. XoxuriahxoX I am also very pleased you liked my work. I like yours as well. I have been gone from Pip for a few months and I am glad to be back. Huggs to you both Kimberly  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
So much wisdom in this piece, and you have made me ponder some circumstances in my own life. Thank you... Patricia |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I really liked the way you wrote this. TD |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
That's the best way to handle it. Really good job! I detect a tiny note of cynicism, which is helpful no doubt in certain moments. But what really counts is the awareness of your own value. Loved it. Love, Margherita |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Patricia, ThisDiamond, and Margherita, Thank you all for your comments. It took much pain and growth to get to this point where I could write this. Bless you all. Huggs Kimberly |
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nedj Member
since 2006-06-23
Posts 87Oregon USA |
My father told me, when I first started taking music seriously, to make the first note sweet, and the last note sweet, and they'll forget what came in between. I probably won't remember what came in between, but the first and last notes were nectar, especially the last. For if there is one thing I've learned about love, it is that there is never, never, ever a good enough reason to lock your heart. Thank you for reminding me that I'm not the only one who knows. A poem's just a poet in a word. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is a very good read...you have shown us parts of yourself that many wish to have as well as traits of compassion and understanding...of freedom and wisdom... very nicely done! |
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jody5 Senior Member
since 2005-12-21
Posts 876California, U.S.A. |
Nadj, Thank you for your comment I learned how not to lock my heart when I became a christian. I read all the scriptures on love and learned what it was. Magnus Thank you as well, I write from my heart and have studied many religions which is where wisdom developed in me. Huggs Kimberly |
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nedj Member
since 2006-06-23
Posts 87Oregon USA |
This is getting a little kinky for reasons you you could not know. Yesterday morning, either just before or just after I wrote my response, I shared an experience with an acquaintence (then, now I think a friend). We had both witnessed something earlier that was distressing to both of us. When we talked about it later, it turned into a positively thrilling shared moment during which we both shed more than one tear. The point is that she said that she had, like you, found her way to that view we were discussing (not locking your heart) through her Christian faith. I had come there by an entirely different route. Yet there we were, smack dab in the identical place, with our hearts pounding in joy at being able to share it so completely and satisfyingly. So this 24 hours has been a double header. :-) I love it when a plan comes together. LOL Thanks again. A poem's just a poet in a word. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
You tell him. |
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