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Making my Bed

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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside


0 posted 06-16-2006 01:25 AM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for BluesSerenade



Missing those days
and the way we never were
wading among the rise and fall
of some summers' sea.
I was she, selling sea shells
and so many sand dollars for the taking
never-mind the castles
washed away.

Each storm
like a silver torch that touched down
striking the chimes
of some sun day mass
constructing a new day  
that would tumble in my mind
like a wild fire
put to shame.

But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down  
letting go in order to heal.

And I still don't know
if I will be here a year from now
or if you will ever have any inclination
of my heartache and what it took
to turn away and let go.

I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to.

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1slick_lady
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1 posted 06-16-2006 01:28 AM       View Profile for 1slick_lady   Email 1slick_lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit 1slick_lady's Home Page   View IP for 1slick_lady

"Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to."

damn !!!
Debo
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2 posted 06-16-2006 03:23 AM       View Profile for Debo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Debo

Love this write. So sad yet beautiful

Debo

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3 posted 06-16-2006 06:38 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

you sure know how to tug the heartstrings m'bluelady

love the new picture! You look stunning!
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines


4 posted 06-16-2006 07:02 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down  
letting go in order to heal.


sad that sometimes that's the path we have to travel before healing~~

and love
M
LeeJ
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Missing those days
and the way we never were
wading among the rise and fall
of some summers' sea.
I was she, selling sea shells
and so many sand dollars for the taking
never-mind the castles
washed away.


wonderful read...beatifully written and expressed
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 06-16-2006 08:21 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

ms bluezy...cool stuff here
enjoyed watching your heart
and your mirrors..dance their pen
Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


7 posted 06-16-2006 09:02 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Love this Bluesy!
So good to read you again.
Love your new pic.
Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 06-16-2006 09:09 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

  hey Miss Bluesy!  So very nice to read you this morning..

Sad but oh so hauntingly beautiful..as always.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Martie
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It's good to see you Lori....as always you write your heart.... I also feel strength in this poem!  
Duncan
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10 posted 06-16-2006 10:26 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

"I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to.


Loribelle, you do have quite the talent, for smooooooothing out those covers...  
Good to read ya again!!

Nightshade
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just out of reach


11 posted 06-16-2006 10:44 AM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down  
letting go in order to heal.


This really touched me Bluesygirl and I am placing it into my library.
Be well my friend. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

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12 posted 06-16-2006 12:43 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I can always count on reading a "woman's heart" when you post, and this was no exception, and exceptional!

I recall the feeling myself but it didn't last all that long and I moved on.

Waste not a second ~ Carpe' Diem

JL
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13 posted 06-16-2006 01:39 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

This is such a beautiful write.
BUT... SO SAD!

"But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down  
letting go in order to heal."

Especially this verse.

Love this write!

JL
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14 posted 06-16-2006 03:27 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

sigh, is that why I don't like to make my bed?
for that act might cover up all those memories?
iliana
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15 posted 06-16-2006 04:24 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Bluesy....the analogies in this were great...one of my favorities was the black and blue sky bruises....awesome.  Flowing from your heart with such tenderness, but oh, I feel for ya..........jo
jody5
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You took me back to my own memories.  I survived and so will you.  great expression of your heart.

Huggs  Kimberly

BluesSerenade
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17 posted 06-16-2006 09:31 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

You're all so good to me.
Thank you, very very much!
Gentle Spirit
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18 posted 06-17-2006 08:14 AM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Lori, I almost missed this!  So good to see you posting. You have given me an entire new view on making the bed.
Your heart shines so, when you write.

You, m'sweet lady, have been very, very missed.  

seek the flame within yourself
and let your soul be cleansed by
the fire of love.  Axel Ekenstierna

inkedgoddess
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19 posted 06-17-2006 06:39 PM       View Profile for inkedgoddess   Email inkedgoddess   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for inkedgoddess

I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.


oooo oooo baby
love your golden torchsongs
when they weave in between
the waves
suthern
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20 posted 06-22-2006 12:29 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to.

You write this bone-deep ache with such beauty... excellent! *S*
Honeybunch
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And I very nearly missed this wonderful write - so pleased I didn't so back up to the top with it.  Good to see you here again with a sad but so beautiful write!  Just leave the bed unmade every now and again - it's like telling the world to go to ... wherever!  
Patricia
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22 posted 06-24-2006 08:32 AM       View Profile for Patricia   Email Patricia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Patricia

And I still don't know
if I will be here a year from now
or if you will ever have any inclination
of my heartache and what it took
to turn away and let go.

Oh my goodness...I feel as if you tuned into me and expressed with uncanny exactness my recent experience of letting go. And the tears of letting go finally came...

Exceptional writing!

Patricia
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23 posted 06-24-2006 09:51 AM       View Profile for GTP   Email GTP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GTP

a beautiful write!...filled with longing and pain which we feel when we lose love...
SmartChick
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24 posted 06-24-2006 11:20 AM       View Profile for SmartChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmartChick's Home Page   View IP for SmartChick

Oh my! You have sure brought back some memories with this one. This one really pulls at my heart strings.
 
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