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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2006-06-16 01:25 AM

Missing those days
and the way we never were
wading among the rise and fall
of some summers' sea.
I was she, selling sea shells
and so many sand dollars for the taking
never-mind the castles
washed away.

Each storm
like a silver torch that touched down
striking the chimes
of some sun day mass
constructing a new day
that would tumble in my mind
like a wild fire
put to shame.

But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down
letting go in order to heal.

And I still don't know
if I will be here a year from now
or if you will ever have any inclination
of my heartache and what it took
to turn away and let go.

I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

1 posted 2006-06-16 01:28 AM

"Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to."

damn !!!

Debo
Member

since 2006-04-18

Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.

2 posted 2006-06-16 03:23 AM

Love this write. So sad yet beautiful

Debo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2006-06-16 06:38 AM

you sure know how to tug the heartstrings m'bluelady

love the new picture! You look stunning!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2006-06-16 07:02 AM

But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down
letting go in order to heal.

sad that sometimes that's the path we have to travel before healing~~

and love
M

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2006-06-16 07:04 AM

Missing those days
and the way we never were
wading among the rise and fall
of some summers' sea.
I was she, selling sea shells
and so many sand dollars for the taking
never-mind the castles
washed away.

wonderful read...beatifully written and expressed

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2006-06-16 08:21 AM

ms bluezy...cool stuff here
enjoyed watching your heart
and your mirrors..dance their pen

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2006-06-16 09:02 AM

Love this Bluesy!
So good to read you again.
Love your new pic.
Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2006-06-16 09:09 AM

hey Miss Bluesy! So very nice to read you this morning..

Sad but oh so hauntingly beautiful..as always.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2006-06-16 09:33 AM

It's good to see you Lori....as always you write your heart.... I also feel strength in this poem!

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

10 posted 2006-06-16 10:26 AM

"I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to.

Loribelle, you do have quite the talent, for smooooooothing out those covers...

Good to read ya again!!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

11 posted 2006-06-16 10:44 AM

But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down
letting go in order to heal.

This really touched me Bluesygirl and I am placing it into my library.
Be well my friend. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

12 posted 2006-06-16 12:43 PM

I can always count on reading a "woman's heart" when you post, and this was no exception, and exceptional!

I recall the feeling myself but it didn't last all that long

and I moved on.

Waste not a second ~ Carpe' Diem

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

13 posted 2006-06-16 01:39 PM

This is such a beautiful write.
BUT... SO SAD!

"But the sky held up
relentlessly
like a black and blue shiner
bruising my mood.
I was there and it hurt
to burn so far down
letting go in order to heal."

Especially this verse.

Love this write!

JL

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

14 posted 2006-06-16 03:27 PM

sigh, is that why I don't like to make my bed?
for that act might cover up all those memories?

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

15 posted 2006-06-16 04:24 PM

Bluesy....the analogies in this were great...one of my favorities was the black and blue sky bruises....awesome. Flowing from your heart with such tenderness, but oh, I feel for ya..........jo

jody5
Senior Member

since 2005-12-21

Posts 876
California, U.S.A.

16 posted 2006-06-16 04:26 PM

You took me back to my own memories. I survived and so will you. great expression of your heart.

Huggs Kimberly

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

17 posted 2006-06-16 09:31 PM

You're all so good to me.
Thank you, very very much!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

18 posted 2006-06-17 08:14 AM

Lori, I almost missed this! So good to see you posting. You have given me an entire new view on making the bed.
Your heart shines so, when you write.

You, m'sweet lady, have been very, very missed.

seek the flame within yourself
and let your soul be cleansed by
the fire of love. Axel Ekenstierna

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

19 posted 2006-06-17 06:39 PM

I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

oooo oooo baby
love your golden torchsongs
when they weave in between
the waves

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

20 posted 2006-06-22 12:29 PM

I have walked past that window
a thousand times
breathing you in
catching a glimpse
of the view of lights shining
so faraway.

Oh, how I miss loving you,
and making my bed
the way I used to.

You write this bone-deep ache with such beauty... excellent! *S*

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

21 posted 2006-06-24 06:16 AM

And I very nearly missed this wonderful write - so pleased I didn't so back up to the top with it. Good to see you here again with a sad but so beautiful write! Just leave the bed unmade every now and again - it's like telling the world to go to ... wherever!

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

22 posted 2006-06-24 08:32 AM

And I still don't know
if I will be here a year from now
or if you will ever have any inclination
of my heartache and what it took
to turn away and let go.

Oh my goodness...I feel as if you tuned into me and expressed with uncanny exactness my recent experience of letting go. And the tears of letting go finally came...

Exceptional writing!

Patricia

GTP
Junior Member

since 2006-06-18

Posts 35
NC...USA

23 posted 2006-06-24 09:51 AM

a beautiful write!...filled with longing and pain which we feel when we lose love...

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

24 posted 2006-06-24 11:20 AM

Oh my! You have sure brought back some memories with this one. This one really pulls at my heart strings.

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

25 posted 2006-06-24 12:09 PM

"Missing those days
and the way we never were..."

so painfully true...

...and all that follows, said perfectly!

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

26 posted 2006-06-25 02:40 AM

"And I still don't know
if I will be here a year from now
or if you will ever have any inclination
of my heartache and what it took
to turn away and let go"

Wonderful torch song Blues. It sings so sad.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

27 posted 2006-06-25 10:30 AM

Dear Lori, this is a wonderful write, the melancholy is so deeply felt ... the gesture of making a bed is so different when it's a lonely place, yes.

Love and hugs, beautiful heart.

Margherita

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

28 posted 2006-06-26 04:21 PM

Bluesy, that is a most beautiful picture
of a lady who writes such wonderful words.

I hope your days are clear, your nights
are calm and your heart ever healing...

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

29 posted 2006-11-04 09:37 PM

There is such an ache in this.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

30 posted 2008-04-26 02:13 AM

Ah Miss Lori,
I spotted a reply on the poem of another and was delighted to sea you again. I think of you often and long for just a word to know how you are. I pray all is well and that you know you are not forgotten. The bonus is this lovely poem of ache and times gone by.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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